Re: "Shambles" / Will Dockery (2017)

> Will-Dockery wrote:
> 
>> Andre Hugo wrote:
>> Will Dockery wrote:
>> 
>>> Shambles
>>> 
>>> Yes, the "Richard Pryor" looking guy was somewhat interesting, except that he was so drunk he was drooling. He either thought I looked like Mark Twain or Gene Wilder, sitting on the bench on Broadway at Midnight, typing. He seemed to think we were from the same home area, somewhere around Kentucky, and then North oats", all these Carolina, where his family worked on "crab boats".
>>> 
>>> All these short stories and his 1970s comedy asides, the out of the side of his mouth political jabs and so on, were pretty entertaining, as I just sat there and typed, playing the white straight man type, like in Stir Crazy and Silver Steak, wild Einstein afro hair flapping in the breeze...
>>> 
>>> That went okay for a few minutes until Pryor knocked over my coffee, seemed to be embarrassed about that, and wandered away, on up the sidewalk.
>>> 
>>> Then when a crack hooker chick in real shambles came along, offered to blow me right there for five bucks, I decided that along with the chilly breeze on my back, perhaps it was time to pack it up for the night.
>>> 
>>> I wanted dark, I got dark.
>>> 
>>> -Will Dockery 2017
>>> 
>> 
>> 
>> Good version.....
>> 
>> Your original is the best though....
>> 
>> Broke into lines is more "poetic"....
> 
> 
> Thanks again, Andre.
> 
> 😏




There is no need to thank George Sulzbach more than once.  He would compliment a turd if you told him to, which is basically what he did. 


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