Re: Red Lipped Stranger by Will Dockery & The Shadowville All-Stars

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> the messenjah wrote:
> Will Dockery <will> wrote:
> 
>> Red Lipped Stranger by Will Dockery & The Shadowville All-Stars /
>> Written by Will Dockery, Brian Mallard & Henry Conley / Vocals - Will
>> Dockery / Vocals - Gini Woolfolk / Guitar - Brian Mallard / Art - Gary
>> Frankfurth / Produced by Robbie Wright © 2009
>> 
>> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qBhcN1WK144
>> 
>> Red Lipped Stranger
>> 
>> Her creep crawls
>> the narrow stairway
>> of the Candlelight Motel
>> to watch for her
>> from a window.
>> 
>> Rethinking
>> his infatuation
>> but clinging
>> to his vision of her
>> as the red lipped stranger.
>> 
>> Downstairs
>> the desk clerk's cat
>> slithers through
>> the service entrance.
>> 
>> The vampirate
>> on a motorbike
>> passes below
>> to the westbound bridge
>> werewolf on her back.
>> 
>> Jennifer at riverbend
>> watches gunboats
>> smacks her foot
>> on the bright red clay.
>> 
>> Jennifer gives good lyric
>> she wrote this poem
>> she's no bum.
>> 
>> But she's not there
>> on the other side
>> of the greenish wall.
>> 
>> Through a three-inch-wall
>> he hears
>> bedsprings rattle
>> rustle of dry-hump,
>> some guy's mumbles.
>> 
>> Hears the fat blonde waitress
>> whip it in bondage
>> the sounds
>> lull him to sleep.
>> 
>> The hand of Uncle Sugar
>> still taking notes
>> as a new standard bearer
>> hands out trophies
>> to the winners.
>> 
>> His trillion dollar gash
>> flakes from the bone
>> as gravity tears
>> a pound of dust.
>> 
>> Clings to a picture book
>> the missing part of himself
>> as if perpetually
>> anchored
>> to his invisible erection.
>> 
>> At Lucky Seven Lounge
>> she tries
>> not to reveal herself
>> but she stubbornly clutches
>> her empty shoes.
>> 
>> Something
>> seems missing
>> in the broad daylight
>> when the details
>> are displayed.
>> 
>> All that remains are
>> her flat black hat
>> her oversized lantern
>> her broken laptop.
>> 
>> No poor boy on the street
>> can speak of her
>> or the island on the river.
>> Or about her return...
>> her resurrection.
>> 
>> -Will Dockery
>> 
> 
> 
> Finally. Someone posts some good work. Keep rockin' Will.
> 
> http://skywriter.diaryland.com/090930_75.html



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From the archives, a critique from Chuck L.

Maybe rest in peace.
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