Re: slides from the talk I gave last friday KDE 15

Suggestions and edits attached.

On Fri, Dec 2, 2011 at 7:12 AM, Agustin Benito Bethencourt
<[email protected]> wrote:
> Hi,
>
> since I'm repeating this talk on December 19th in La Laguna College (Canary
> Islands, Spain), I've put some time into updating the slides a little.
>
> Link: http://www.slideshare.net/toscalix/presentation-college-communityproject
>
> On Thursday 20 October 2011 13:40:28 Agustin Benito Bethencourt wrote:
>> Hi Kevin,
>>
>> I added your suggestions. Thanks for your feedback.
>>
>> If somebody needs the .tex file, please ask me.
>>
>> Link: http://www.slideshare.net/toscalix/presentation-college-
>> communityproject
>>
>> On Monday 17 October 2011 21:35:00 Kevin Krammer wrote:
>> > Hi Agustin,
>> >
>> > On Monday, 2011-10-17, Agustín Benito wrote:
>> > > Hi,
>> > >
>> > > link to the slides:
>> > > http://www.slideshare.net/toscalix/presentation-college-
>>
>> communityproject
>>
>> > > This is the first time I gave this talk and I plan to repeat it in
>>
>> other
>>
>> > > colleges from Spain. Any feedback will be welcome.
>> >
>> > Great work!
>> > I really enjoyed reading the slides :)
>> >
>> > some smaller issues
>> > - One typo on slide 47: wich should be which
>> > - "Teachers must" maybe better "Teachers should"
>> > - The teachers section could maybe mention that something
>>
>> like Toulouse Uni
>>
>> > has been doing allows students to work on some real software
>>
>> instead of
>>
>> > artificial academic projects that are discarded after the term
>>
>> ends.
>>
>> > Cheers,
>> > Kevin
> --
> Agustin Benito Bethencourt
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remove comma between "and" & "smartphones"
add "Intel" before "Atom"

page 29
add comma between "do" & "adapted"

page 34
replace "user" with "use"

page 38
replace "KDE is a vital experience" with "KDE is an experience" or "KDE has vitality"
Most commonly, "vital" means essential to life. So this sentence lands oddly. You could either display "KDE is an experience" and then talk about what that means. Or you could speak about KDE's vitality--alive, lots of activity, people working together, purposeful activities.

page 41
replace "enviroments" with "environments"

page 45
replace "hardware" with "Hardware"
replace "Gov." with "Government"

page 52
global - local - global hyphen spacing is off

page 56
replace "iniciatives" with "initiatives"
Toulouse University sentence reads awkwardly.
"Toulouse University experience includes teachers..." or
"Toulouse University experience does include teachers..."

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replace "succesfully" with "successfully"