Re: KDE Applications 17.04 annoucement ready for comments

Paul Brown <[email protected]> Thu, 20 Apr 2017 08:27:34 +0200
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On Thursday, 20 April 2017 05:44:25 CEST Ivana Isadora Devcic wrote:
> Thanks, Albert! There's a typo in this sentence:
> 
> "If you are teaching or leaning to play music, you have to check out
> 
> > Minuet."
> 
> "leaning" should be "learning".

Whoops. Sorry.

> 
> Also, I would suggest to move the following part from the intro:
> 
> "Kajongg, KCachegrind and more (Release Notes) have now been ported to KDE
> Frameworks 5. We look forward to your feedback and insight into the newest
> features introduced with this release
> 
> We have discontinued the following packages: pim-storage-service-manager
> and kommander. This will help us focus on the rest of the code.

I don't think the paragraph above is relevant to anybody, except the very, 
very initiated, and the very, very initiated will probably read the changelog. 
I say cut it.

> 
> K3b has joined the KDE Applications release."

This, on the other hand, is good.

> and place it under the "And more!" subheading, because it doesn't make much
> sense to just tack it onto the introductory paragraph without any
> connecting thoughts/information.

Agreed. It is not relevant to the intro.

> Instead of that, you could end the introduction with a modified version of
> Paul's sentence, and just write "Enjoy your new software made by KDE!", or
> something like that. Just a suggestion, of course; you don't have to. :)

"Enjoy you new apps!" is shorter and the context is clear: we mention KDE in 
the text A LOT.

I would change the image of KAlgebra to one of KAlgebra on mobile. I know 
these images are tall and narrow and that messes a bit with the formatting, 
but the big news with KAlgebra is precisely the convergence thing and the 
snaps taken from a mobile (of which you have 3), are more interesting. Maybe 
the one with the 3D function would be best, because it is cool looking.

Cheers

Paul


> 
> 2017-04-20 1:16 GMT+02:00 Albert Astals Cid <[email protected]>:
> > Just finished putting up Paul's version (with some minor changes of my
> > own) on
> > 
> > https://www.kde.org/announcements/announce-applications-17.04.0.php?
> > iknowthisisunfinished=true
> > 
> > You've got ~16h to comment.
> > 
> > My minor changes from Paul's version are:
> > 
> > Removed "The very newest and best collection of apps for Plasma is ready
> > to hit your desktop."
> > because our apps are not "for Plasma", they work in any desktop
> > environment.
> > 
> > Removed "Enjoy your new desktop!" because what we are releasing here is
> > just apps "nothing to do" the desktop.
> > 
> > Removed "Literally dozens of libraries – the backbone of the KDE framework
> > and apps – have been improved and stabilised, making life easier for
> > developers, and contributing to a nimbler experience for end users."
> > because even if it's true that KDE Applications release has some libraries
> > they're meant to be internal to the apps (i.e. not shared with the world
> > like KDE Frameworks) so i don't think it's worth speaking much of
> > libraries
> > when releasing KDE Applications.
> > 
> > Changed "Dolphin: Plasma's favorite file explorer" to "Dolphin: Our
> > favorite file explorer" because Dolphin works just fine outside Plasma.
> > 
> > Changed some british to american spellings.
> > 
> > Added the three paragraphs above the "KAlgebra" section.
> > 
> > Of course i can be convinced those sentences need to make it back :)
> > 
> > Cheers,
> > 
> >   Albert


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