Edit/Approval Odin Fastpack Jacket - Ray Estrella

Hi Ray, 
 

 Very thorough review, I think you just about covered it all!  And you certainly got some good test conditions, lots more rain than I'd ever want to hike in.  I tried to note only the most ambiguous places that needed hyphenated compound nouns, and I'm pretty sure we don't want emoticons in reviews and reports.
 

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 Clothing > Jackets > Helly Hansen Odin Fastpack Jacket
 

 ~Bob
 

 

 ###Actual weights: 9.7 oz (257 g)
 EDIT: weight
 

 ###Breathability I guess is on a par with other 2.5 construction coats, 
 EDIT: 2.5 oz/sq yd    But could leave it at 2.5 for rest of review after it's noted here
 

 ###In sticking with HH's "technical" tag the Fastpack has some nice winter specific features 
 EDIT:  winter-specific
 

 ###Not only does this use less cord (read "less weight" my fellow gram-wienies) but it keeps the front flatter when pulled tight making for a more stylish look.
 EDIT:  weenies  (ref. "tiny", rather than hot dogs)
 Edit: pulled tight, making for
 

 ###AT the end of the sleeves are the slightly stiffened cuffs.
 EDIT:  At
 

 ###Finally the HH Fastpack has the Helly Hasen name on the left breast,
 EDIT: Hansen
 

 ###Here's a tale of two rivers, a 110 miles (177 km) apart. 
 EDIT:  rivers, 110 miles
 

 ###The funny thing is that of the two best feeling versions 
 EDIT:  best-feeling
 

 ###In Oregon I wore a short sleeved orange shirt for five of the days 
 EDIT: short-sleeved
 

 ###It didn't last a season before "wetting-out" a term that describes
 EDIT: needs comma after "wetting-out"
 

 ###Which brings up number three. The waterproofing. On a very memorable trip with Dave we encountered three straight days of rain. As we had a mid-point camp that we would use again I brought extra rain gear with me. (The perks of buying way too much gear each year…) Both jackets succumbed to the dreaded wetting-out, letting water finally pass right through. I kept my jacket on just as a wind block but watched water run out of my sleeves with every trekking pole plant and my shoes filled with water running from inside my WPB pants.
 Edit/Comment:  This paragraph seems out of place re. the Odin jacket...  but I think you're saying that if you'd had the Odin on these trips you wouldn't have experienced the wetting-out
 

 ###The Fastpack kept me dry again but my pants, which I washed and even put into a dryer for a few minutes to reactivate the DWR started wetting-out again on the top of the thighs. (Sighs…)
 EDIT: needs comma after DWR
 Edit: might want to define "DWR" here 
 

 ###OK, let's talk about breathability. Manufactures love to spout the Water Vapor Transmission Rates 
 Edit:  I think that "water vapor transmission rates" doesn't need initial caps
 

 ###but the initial sticker shock should be prepared for. ;-)
 
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