Edit/Approval - Patagonia Micro Puff - Andrea Murland

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Not much for you, Andrea, very well done. After revising (or not – no EDITS), you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/pu7ylrn  Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
  
 Cheers, Richard
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 ### Other features of the jacket include articulated elbows, elastic cuffs, a fabric hang loop, and a drawcord hem.  ###
 Edit: I'm used to calling it a hangtag. Is hang loop Canadian? Even if not, your meaning is clear so up to you.
  
 ### The jacket is a comfortable fit on me.  It is comfortable in the arms, bust and waist, but a bit snug in the hips.  ###
 
 Edit: Also not mandatory, but it would help your readers if you provided (here or in your personal data), your measurements in these categories. I try to do that with any gear – shoe size for boots, hat size for a hat, chest and waist for a jacket, torso for a pack, etc.
 Edit: A style matter - consider replacing one of the "comfortable" with a synonym, as it's a bit awkward to see the same adjective in consecutive sentences.
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