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Hi Eric,
First, thanks for your patience, and second, a big apology from the Editors at BGT for taking so long to get to your OR, it was a delay at our end.
Thank you for your first Owner Review, your initial edits will follow. They will take the following format;
EDIT: must be changed
Edit: should be changed but will be left to your discretion
Comment: just that or something to think about
When you have made the changes please repost here with REPOST added to the subject line, followed by the product name and your name.
You may also wish to browse the reviews of other experienced members for examples of the proper form. If you have any questions about the edits below, please don't hesitate to ask!
Regards,
~Bob
###Solio Bolt
EDIT: Append "Solar Charger" to OR title, so readers will know what they're reading about
EDIT: BOLT (all caps) here, and everywhere else below. BGT reviews try to spell product names exactly like their makers present on their websites and literature.
###EMAIL: [email protected]
Edit: Although not required, many BGTers obfuscate their email addresses to avoid some amount of "scraping" (automated harvesting of addresses for spam) e.g. romad4u yahoo com A human will know what to do with it.
###GENDER: m
EDIT: M
###Camping, hiking, mountain biking and off-roading my Jeep as often as my schedule allows.
EDIT: needs to be a complete sentence, e.g. "I get out camping, hiking...."
###Manufacturer's Website: www.solio.com
Solio Website
EDIT: You'll want to make "www.solio.com" the hyperlink, and delete "Solio Website"
Edit: for a device like this, adding the manufacturer's Charge Times to the Product Information is a good thing to do. It'll be relevant later when you report your own times.
###Other details: Coming in white only, this compact square unit is roughly the size of my palm and fits easily in most pockets.
EDIT: ...fits easily in most of my pockets. (avoids projection, i.e. you're considering your own pockets, not someone else's
EDIT: in this paragraph, also mention/describe the integrated battery, which is an important feature of this device
###There's one mini-USB for charging the unit from a wall charger or a computer.
EDIT: More clear (and accurate) to say "The BOLT comes with one..."
Edit: might also add that it comes with a pencil for orienting to the sun (according to Solio's website specs)
###Not to mention the emergency phone is dead and so is the car battery situation.
EDIT: Need to reword this sentence to make it more complete and less awkward; perhaps something like "I also would like to avoid a situation where the emergency phone is dead as well as the car battery."
###In the sun, it took a full 8 hours of sunlight, making sure to turn it to keep it facing the sun in order to get a full charge.
EDIT: to make the sentence clearer, move "to get a full charge" to after "sunlight", and modify the second phrase to "I made sure to turn it to keep it facing the sun."
###Plugging it into the wall or computer takes almost 5 hours to completely charge it from dead.
EDIT: from a completely discharged state.
###Solio's website claims to charge a phone to full in 90 minutes, it charges my Samsung Note 2 almost to a 3/4 battery in about that time.
EDIT: Solio's website claims that the Bolt charges a phone to full in 90 minutes; it charges
###This isn't really a surprise, but still worth noting that this isn't going to be fast like slapping a brand new battery in.
EDIT: going to be fast, like slapping (comma after fast)
###Set for Charging [image]
EDIT: Any images grabbed from a manufacturer's site must be credited with a line under the photo, e.g. "Photo courtesy Solio Inc."
Edit: If you use this image, you may want to explain what the pencil is doing there
###The exposed solar panel scares me though.
Edit: may want to reword this to make it clear that you're worried about the panel breaking (that's what I assumed, and confirmed by your statement below in "things I don't like")
###Durability: It's survived my Maxpedition Versiapak in the outside pocket
Edit: replace "It's" with "The Bolt" (try to use the product's name frequently in your reviews, instead of "it" - it helps the reader remember what you're talking about
###Ease of use: There is only one button. That's it. Turn it on/off/charge and charge level indicator all in one flashing button.
EDIT: This would be better placed in the Field Use section of your OR, since readers will want to know how the device works; even more description of using the Bolt would be great. But you can summarize your findings again in the "Things I Like" section as well.
###power button [image]
EDIT: like the other image, need to credit this one
Edit: I strongly urge you to use your own photos. Although BGT allows manufacturer images (with credit lines), it's much better to take your own pics - they are usually more interesting, you can add that all-important context by showing the reader how you use the gear being reviewed, and you can show details that are important to you as as user/reviewer.
###I'd really like to see a fast charge wall plug in option.
EDIT: fast-charge (this is a compound noun)
EDIT: plug-in
###Exposed on/off button.
EDIT: delete extra blank line between "Solar panel..." and "Exposed..."
###While I like the ease of using this single button its placement on the top and its semi exposed placement does leave it vulnerable to getting turned on in the bag. That being said, I've only found it turned on twice in the year I've had it. (And I carry it everyday)
EDIT: Consider moving these sentences (perhaps with more elaboration if necessary) to the Field Use section of your OR. But you can still definitely summarize here as well.