Re: Edit - Sport Berkley Bottle - Doug White

Thanks for the feedback. I have made the requested edits and re-posted per your instructions. Thank you for your time. 


     On Friday, January 16, 2015 7:45 AM, "[email protected] [BackpackGearTest]" <[email protected]> wrote:
   


     Doug,  Welcome to BackpackGearTest.org, and thanks for your OwnerReview. I’ll be your editor. This is a good start at a first OR, and I lookforward to working with you to get it ready for posting.  My edits below are in the standard BGT format:  EDIT (all caps) – required changeEdit (initial cap) – suggested change or request forclarificationComment – just that, no change required  After revising you need to do two things. Post the htmlversion of the Report in the Tests/Owner Reviews folder onBackpackGearTest.org, and post the plain text version here, with"Repost," the product name, and your name in the subject line, andwith a tinyurl link to the html version in the body of your message.  Cheers, Richard LyonBGT Editor____________________________________ ### BackpackingBackground:###EDIT: Please add a bit about where you hike and normallength of trip. You've only used about seventy words so you should be able tomake an addition without running over our 100-word limit. ###Manufacturer: Berkey ###
EDIT: Berkey Filter  [Here (but only hereyou must supply the full name of the manufacturer.]  General EDIT: Please add a line for MSRP, and report on themanufacturer's list price for the product - $31 US.]  ### It uses a 2.5 in x 1.25 in (6.3 cm x 3.1 cm ) "Black BerkeyFilter Element"###EDIT: Delete the extra space after "3.1 cm."  ###that uses Seychell's Ionic Adsorption Micro FiltrationTechnology which is a 2micron filter, ###
Edit: 2-micron [with a hyphen]  ### Berkey lists many contaminates on their website that the filter removes aswell as claims the filter can remove food coloring from the water. ###Edit: I'd move "on their website to just before orafter "Berkey." As written it implies the contaminates are found onthe website.  ### Thefilter is inside the bottle ###
Edit: Where inside the bottle? You might furnish a brief description and referto your photo.  ### and water is sucked through it as the water is drank. ###
EDIT: is drunk  ### The manufacturer also claims a 50 year storage shelf life ###
Edit: 50-year [with a hyphen]  ###Berkey claims 25-100 gallons of filter use depending on cleanliness ofthe water source. ###EDIT: What Berkey and you are describing is filter capacity,but that doesn't come across very well. How about "Berkey claims that eachfilter will handle . . ."EDIT: Please add metric equivalent for 25-100 gallons  ###I have used this bottle in various temperatures, as lowas 0 F ( -17 C) andI have used it on hotsummer days. ###
EDIT: Delete the extra space in front of "-17."EDIT: Add an approximate maximum temperature.  ###I like this system as it is simple to manage opposed to otherfilters ###
EDIT: as opposed to other filters  ### I have used this product to filter water from fast moving streams ###
Edit: fast-moving [with a hyphen]  ###The cap closes over the suction tube to keep it pinchedpreventing unwanted water flow and appears that this keeps the suction tube clean and protectedas well.###EDIT: and it appears  ### Thismay have been in part to using it multiple times in the winter and theplastic became brittle,###
EDIT: This may have been due in part  ###I have had the inner tube freeze when temperatures dropinto the low teens###EDIT: low teens F (-10 to -12 C)  ### as I have filtered some very questionable water during 2 separate trips ###
Edit: When using single-digit numbers in something other than a measurementit's easier to follow if the number is written out: "two separate trips"  ## I have always just rinsed everything out really good ###
EDIT: really well  General EDIT: Somewhere in your Review you should add howmany times you've had to change the filter, and if you can estimate the volumeof water filtered before needing to change. A sentence about how to changefilters would help as well. All these are important information whenconsidering an in-bottle filtration system.
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