2nd Edit/Approval OR-LIFELINE ALUMINUM SPORT UTILITY SHOVEL-Doug White

Hello Doug,  

 I missed one edit for you on this OR:  in the "My Experience" section, please add a line break between the two paragraphs.
 

 thanks!
 ~Bob
 

---In [email protected], <geartest@...> wrote :

 Hi Doug - 
 

 Always nice to find some gear that does its job well and that you can count on.  And you get a brownie point for answering the monthly call.
 

 I found a couple of corrections for you, in the usual BGT format:
 EDIT: must be changed
 Edit: should be changed but will be left to your discretion
 Comment: just that or something to think about
 

 After you've finished updating your text, you can upload when ready to the folder at:
 Snow Gear > Axes and Shovels > Lifeline Sport Utility Shovel
 

 Don't forget to delete your test folder draft.
 

 Regards, 
 ~Bob
 

 

 

 ###I backpack in Rocky Mountains just below treeline most of the time. 
 EDIT:  in the Rocky Mountains
 

 ###Listed Weight: 1.3 lb (590 g)
 EDIT:  Lifeline notes the weight as "approximately", good idea to note that here too
 

 ###Measured Weight: 1 lb 3 oz (555 g)
 EDIT:  539 g
 

 ###The shovel pieces connect together via spring-pressured pins that pop out of one piece and secure to holes in the piece that it is being attached too. 
 EDIT:  attached to
 

 ###I have used this shovel on about 10 overnight trips. I have used it in temperatures as low as 0 F (-17 C). I have used it in thick forested regions and I have used it at treeline. I have also used it on day hikes along with multi-day backpacking trips. Since I've owned the shovel, I carry it on all trips where I will encounter snow, even on day hikes. I have used the shovel to dig down to about waist-level. I have used the shovel in shallow and deep snow. I have carried it in my pack both in a collapsed state and in a fully dis-assembled state in its three pieces.
 

 Edit:  This paragraph would read more smoothly if you were able to join some of the sentences and remove some of the "I have used" phrases.  Otherwise your meaning is clear!
 

 ###so I have added some GorrillaTape to the blade where it contacts the strap on my pack
 EDIT: Gorilla Tape (two words, and 1 "r")
 

 ###I can't comment on it's ability to move a large amount of snow in an urgent situation.
 EDIT: its ability
 

 ###For what I was consider a very cheap price, 
 EDIT: For what I considered a very cheap price,
 

 ###I will note that the aluminum does gouge easily if I try moving chunks of ice or accidently hit dirt or rock. 
 EDIT: accidentally