EDIT/Approval - OR - Cascade Designs Therma-Rest NeoAir All Season - Duane Lawrence

 
 Hi Duane, 
 
  
 
 Much better – thanks for the hard work. There are a few edits to deal with which are listed below. They are in the same format as before – EDIT / edit / comment
 
  
 
 MFG web page link
 
 EDIT – your link to the mfg’s site should only be listed as www.cascadedesigns.com http://www.cascadedesigns.com/ 
 
  
 
 “It is made of a 75d Polyester diamond ripstop nylon top layer, with a Polyester Diamond Ripstop Nylon core and bottom.”
 
 EDIT – Within the same sentence you capitalize the material and don’t. Follow the mfg’s style here and only go with it one way throughout.
 
  
 
 “The diamond shaped core is designed to help keep the mattress's shape and maintain its evenness when inflated.”
 
 EDIT – diamond-shaped (with a hyphen)
 
  
 
 “Performance wise it has provided good insulative value even when temperatures were hovering around -30 C (-22 F) during my winter excursions.”
 
 EDIT – Performance-wise” (with a hyphen)
 
  
 
 “When I purchased my matress it only came with the inflation bag.”
 
 EDIT -  spelling of “mattress”
 
  
 
 “I am unfortunately unable to make any observations regarding the mini pump but it does to be a nice add on.”
 
 EDITs – “I am unfortunately unable to make any observations regarding the mini pump but it does ([appear] or [seem]) to be a nice add [on in my opinion].” This is written as projection unless you add that in your opinion or “I wish I had had an opportunity to get a pump with mine or something similar. Be careful to not use a run-on sentence though and break it up is you go longer than this.  
 
 
 
 “Thankfully I have yet to puncture the mattress so am unable to comment on whether or not the manufactures notation that repairs are fast and easy and can be made under two minutes are true.”
 
 EDIT – “manufacturer’s notation” with an [‘s]
 
 EDIT – “made [in] under two minutes”
 
  
 
 “In all I am expecting to get many years of comfortable nights of the NeoAir and am very pleased with all aspects of this mattress.“
 
 EDIT – “comfortable nights [on] the NeoAir and…”
 
  
 
 “Keeps you warm” 
 edit/EDIT – “Keeps (or Kept) [me] warm” otherwise it’s projection as you can only report on your own experiences and how it affected you – not what someone else will possibly experience. Additionally, I would probably write it as “Good thickness and insulative ability helped keep me warm.” Since the pad alone probably didn’t “keep you warm.” 
 
  
 
 So that’s it – go ahead and upload when you’ve addressed these edits. Please remember to delete your test report. You can find your folder at - 
 
 Reviews http://www.backpackgeartest.org/reviews/ > Sleep Gear http://www.backpackgeartest.org/reviews/Sleep%20Gear/ > Pads and Air Mattresses > Therm-a-Rest NeoAir All Season pad
 
 Thanks again and have a great day.
 
 Mike