EDIT OR Petzl Tikka LED Headlamp -Troy Pelzel

"geartest-KbpwapPNqs/[email protected] [BackpackGearTest]" <[email protected]>
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Hi Troy, 
 

 Thanks for your OR!  Always nice to see gear work well for a BGTer.  
 I have a couple of edits for you, in the usual BGT format:
 EDIT: must be changed
 Edit: should be changed but will be left to your discretion
 Comment: just that or something to think about
 

 When you've made your changes, please repost to this group, using the subject line
 REPOST OR Petzl Tikka LED Headlamp -Troy Pelzel
 

 Thanks, and we'll hear from you soon, 
 ~Bob
 

 

 ###I got into backpacking about seven years ago when a friend took me to the Boston Mountains which is part of the Ozarks in Arkansas. 
 Edit: comma after "Mountains" lets the sentence scan better
 

 ###I usually carry my backpack with a tent, camp pad, freeze dried meals and I always carry a water purifier for clean water.
 EDIT: to preserve list integrity (also note compound noun), modify to "...pad, and freeze-dried meals, and I always..." 
 

 ###Other details:3 AAA batteries
 EDIT: space after the colon
 

 ###We got there late at night so right out of the truck I had my lifesaving, hands free headlamp strapped on.
 EDIT: hands-free
 

 ###We camped at about 1800 ft (549 m) in elevation. 
 Edit: "in" not necessary here
 

 ###The temperature was mild about 65 F (36 C) the first night but it rained about 4 in (10 cm). 
 EDIT: dependent phrase needs comma:  "mild, about 65 F (36 C) the first"
 

 ###The Petzl Tikka headlamp is a must have for my backpack. 
 EDIT:  must-have
 

 ###Weather resistant and super bright. From camping to night hiking to grilling in the back yard. 
 EDIT:  Unless you reformat into a bulleted list, these need to be complete sentences.  e.g. "It's weather resistant and super bright, and useful for camping, night hiking, and grilling in the back yard."
 

 ###Going into the third year of use I love the fact that I don't have to worry about purchasing a go to light source.
 EDIT:  go-to
 

 ###THINGS I LIKE
 
 Edit: think about making a bullet list of all the things you like - there were several others cited in your text above (e.g. battery life, water resistance, brightness, etc.).  Readers really like to see a summary list like that.
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