EDIT/APPROVAL - Geigerrig Hydration Engine - Art Tosborvorn
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Art, Please excuse my delay in editing your Repost; I plain missed it. A few more edits, in the same EDIT/Edit format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/ocjw7zh http://tinyurl.com/ocjw7zh Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy. Congratulations on your first Owener Review! Cheers, Richard ___________________________________ ### I carry around 35 lbs (16 kg) in my weekend pack. ### EDIT: 35 lb [BGT abbreviations are always singular.] ### The daypack also comes bladder a small strap to hold the pump to any backpack's shoulder strap.### EDIT: This sentence is garbled. A "with" needs to be added somewhere and something deleted, but I can't figure out what. ### I bought a mouthpiece cap as well as a magnetic clip that attaches to a sternum strap from them separately.### EDIT: from Hydrapak [Unclear if "them" refers to Hydrapak or Geigerrig.] ###To clean the tubes, I run water through it a few times. ### EDIT: Conform your noun and pronoun – Either change "tubes" to "tube" or change "it" to them." ###I sometimes also add a bit of dish soap as well. ### Edit: "also" and "as well" are redundant. I'd delete one or the other.