Re: EDIT/APPROVAL - Geigerrig Hydration Engine - Art Tosborvorn

Hi Richard,

Thanks a lot for the suggestions. I made the edits you pointed out and
uploaded it.
Thanks again!

Art

On Thu, Jul 9, 2015 at 4:56 PM, [email protected] [BackpackGearTest]
<[email protected]> wrote:

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> Please excuse my delay in editing your Repost; I plain missed it. A few
> more edits, in the same EDIT/Edit format. After revising you may upload to *http://tinyurl.com/ocjw7zh
> <http://tinyurl.com/ocjw7zh>*
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>  Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
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> Congratulations on your first Owener Review!
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> Cheers, Richard
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> ### I carry around 35 lbs (16 kg) in my weekend pack. ###
> EDIT: 35 lb [BGT abbreviations are always singular.]
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> ### The daypack also comes bladder a small strap to hold the pump to any
> backpack's shoulder strap.###
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> EDIT: This sentence is garbled. A "with" needs to be added somewhere and
> something deleted, but I can't figure out what.
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> ### I bought a mouthpiece cap as well as a magnetic clip that attaches to
> a sternum strap from them separately.###
> EDIT: from Hydrapak [Unclear if "them" refers to Hydrapak or Geigerrig.]
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> ###To clean the tubes, I run water through it a few times. ###
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> EDIT: Conform your noun and pronoun – Either change "tubes" to "tube" or
> change "it" to them."
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> ###I sometimes also add a bit of dish soap as well. ###
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> Edit: "also" and "as well" are redundant. I'd delete one or the other.
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