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Joe,
You've just earned a Brownie point. Edits below in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/qbcmp6r http://tinyurl.com/qbcmp6r Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
See you on the next one.
Cheers, Richard
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### Manufacturer: REI, Inc. ###
EDIT: Recreational Equipment, Inc. [Here we require the full legal name of the manufacturer.]
### Purchased: January, 2014 ###
Edit: The comma is unnecessary.
Comment: Good on you for using Purchased date rather than Manufactured date.
### Wt: 20 oz (567 g) ###
EDIT: Weight
### Five length-wise tubes are all about 2 in (5 cm) thick by about 2 1/8 in (5.4 cm) wide. A larger lengthwise tube at each side about 2 1/2 in thick by 3 1/4 in (6.4 x 8.3 cm) wide makes a pronounced edge. ###
Edit: You spell "length-wise" with a hyphen in the first sentence, as one word in the second. I suggest selecting one or the other and being consistent.
### I've slept on this mattress 41 nights over 17 outings in temperatures from slightly above freezing to 80 F (27 C). ###
Edit: Was it 80 F when you slept on it? Here and elsewhere I don't think it's necessary to include the daytime temperature unless you napped atop the mattress.
### I used it 2 April nights on snow (Mt. Shasta, CA USA) where it was very hot at 10,400 ft (3,170 m) during the day and not quite freezing inside the tent at night. I spent 3 April nights ###
Edit: When using single digits in text (rather than as a measurement) spelling out the number – two or three April nights – aids readability. Note that you do that with "One" in the last sentence of this paragraph.
EDIT: California. [Some of our international readers may not be familiar with USPS abbreviations. Here and elsewhere. Or you could put CA in parentheses the first time you use California, in your Tester Information section. Heyward, California (CA), USA.
### The pronounced side "rails" actually do help keep me from rolling off, without which I occasionally have a tendancy to do. ###
EDIT: tendency [spelling]
### One of my previous complaints was having to wake up too much to get back atop a fat mattress after rolling off. ###
Comment: I know that feeling only too well.
### I think I gave up on the stuff sack as it was too difficult to get the mattress back in, requiring three lengthwise creases and fewer is better.###
Comment: And that one too.