Edit/Approval - Bilgy Tarptent - Mike Pearl

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Mike –
  
 Excellent Review, the first DIY one I've edited in quite a while. The photos really add to the text. Edit's below in the standard BGT EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/pnfw5c9
  
 Cheers, Richard
 
  
 ###  I am a three-season, learning to be a four season backpacker and year round hiker.  ###
 Edit: four-season [With a hyphen. Especially since you used one for "three-season" in the same sentence.]
  
 ### Listed Door Height: 36 in (91 cm)
 Listed Foot Height: 26 in (66 cm)
 Listed Floor Area: 37 x 93 in (94 x 236 cm) / 24 sq ft (2.2 sq m)
 Listed Tarp Coverage: 69 in (175 cm) Front x 43 in (109 cm) Rear x 121 in (307 cm) Ridgeline ###
 Edit: Consider adding measured equivalents in your preferred pitch.
  
 ### They also sell patterns and instructions) for making a variety ###
 EDIT: Delete the parenthesis after "instructions."
  
 ### I purchased the kit  (materials, pattern and instructions for the one person Bilgy Tarptent as one package. ###
 Edit: one-person [with a hyphen]
  
 ### Each of theses items are available individually, fabric seconds are also available at a lower price. Seconds are fabrics with cosmetic imperfections they might be slightly dirty or have narrow, whitish streaks from extra silicone. ###
 EDIT: is available ["each" is singular"]
 EDIT: Add a semicolon after "imperfections."
  
 ### Silnylon is a silicon coated nylon, ###
 Edit: silicon-coated [with a hyphen]
  
 ### The length of the guy lines are adjustable for vary the pitch of the tarp.###
 EDIT: is adjustable ["length" is singular.]
 EDIT: to vary [or "for varying"]
  
 ###  Inside the bug net there are storage pockets on the left and right ###
 Edit: Consider giving the pockets' size.
  
 ### the two important pieces of advice were use a small needle and keep the material taught.  ###
 EDIT: taut [spelling]
  
 ### I read through the instruction fully before doing anything.  ###
 Edit: You usually use "instructions," plural, but here and one other place it's the singular. I'd use the plural throughout.
  
 ### There are step by step directions ###
 Edit: step-by-step [two hyphens]
  
 ### Tools required to make the Bilgy are sewing machine (I used a Sears Kenmore), ###
 Edit: Consider deleting the parenthetical. I don't think it adds to your Review, and BGT frowns on mentioning manufacturers other than the one whose product is being reviewed.
  
 ### A work area of about 11 foot by 16 foot is needed for laying out pattern for cutting of larger pieces. ###
 EDIT: Add the metric conversion.
  
 ### It was still chilly over night ###
 EDIT: What's chilly? Give an approximate low temperature.
 Edit: overnight [one word]
  
 ### This happen while set up on a wooden tent platform. ###
 EDIT: happened
  
 ###  I am able to sit cross leg inside and even knell ###
 EDIT: kneel
  
 ### It's not painful do it can mess up the pitch of the tarp.###
 EDIT: but it can mess up
  
 
 ### The materials supplied by Quest Outfitter have been of good quality.  ###
 EDIT: Quest Outfitters
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