Edit - Olicamp XCelerator - Dan Hotchkiss

"[email protected] [BackpackGearTest]" <[email protected]> 17 Nov 2016 19:42:24 -0800
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Dan, Welcome to BackpackGearTest.org, and thanks for your Owner Review. I’ll be your editor. This is a good start at a first OR, and I look forward to working with you to get it ready for posting.
  
 My edits below are in standard BGT format:
  
 EDIT (all caps) – required change
 Edit (initial cap) – suggested change or request for clarification
 Comment – just that, no change required
  
 This may look like a long list but there's little other than conforming to BGT conventions and general grammatical corrections.  There's really nothing that you can't fix quickly. I hope that you'll bear with me through this process. 
  
 After revising you need to do two things. Post the html version of the Report in the Tests/Owner Reviews folder on BackpackGearTest.org, and post the plain text version here, with "Repost," the product name, and your name in the subject line, and with a tinyurl link to the html version in the body of your message. You'll get a faster edit of the rived OR if you email me offlist to let me know you've posted it.
  
 Cheers, Richard Lyon
 BGT Editor
 
  
 ###Weight: 230 lbs (104 kg)###
 EDIT: 230 lb [All BGT abbreviations are singular.] 

  
 ### Email address ###
 Edit: I'd write this out – dhotch AT yahoo DOT com – to limit spamming opportunities.
  
 ### Having an extremely light pack is not a top priority for me, but everything needs to be justified. ###
 Edit: everything I carry [general clarification]
  
 ### Weight: 3.5 oz (98 g)
 Size: 3" x 3.5" (76 mm x 89 mm)###
 EDIT: These are listed dimensions. BGT requires both listed and measured dimensions [each properly identified] to be stated in this section. Move your measured dimensions from the later test to here. Same goes for the pot dimensions.
  
 ### Output: 9,560 BTU/hr (2,802 watts) ###
 EDIT: Indicate that this is what the manufacturer says. Unless you've measured it.
  
 ###vThe Olicamp Xcelerator Titanium with XTS pot is a remote canister stove with a 32 oz (.95 Liter) hard anodized, aluminum pot. ###
 EDIT: 0.95 liter [Any dimension less than a full unit needs a zero in front – too easy to miss that little period.]
 Edit: No need for the comma after "anodized."
  
 ### The system is designed to offer some of the benefits of a self contained heat exchanger system, ###
 Edit: self-contained [with a hyphen]
  
 ### The Xcelerator Titanium stove is a very compact and light weight stove, weighing as little as many direct canister stoves on the market. ###
 Edit: lightweight [one word]
 EDIT: This is more serious. BGT doesn't allow what we call projection – reporting on anything other than your personal experience. The highlighted phrase implies knowledge of  the market [listed weight for all other stoves] and thus needs to be revised. Maybe "weighing as little as many other canister stoves that I checked out."
  
 ### The XTS pot is a 32 oz (0.95 liter) capacity, hard anodized pot with heat exchanger fins spot welded to the bottom perimeter. In addition, a silicone like lid ###
 Edit: spot welded [with a hyphen]
 Edit: silicone-like [with a hyphen]
  
 ### The pot has stamped in graduations showing 8, 16, 24 & 32 oz; but no metric markings.###
 Edit: stamped-in [with a hyphen]
 Edit: Where are the markings? I'd indicate that.
  
 ### Usage Conditions ###
  EDIT: Please add temperature, humidity, precipitation, and other conditions relative to stove use.
  
 ### no higher than about 900 ft (274 m) ###
 Edit: The Imperial is rounded, so round off the metric: 275 m.
  
 ### It has performed well boiling water for freeze dried backpacker bag meals ###
 Edit: freeze-dried [with a hyphen]
  
 ### as well as cooking noodles, and soup. The precise control over flame height has even allowed me to dry bake muffins in the pot, on a number of occasions.###
 Edit: Neither comma is necessary.
  
 ### As such, it should not be attempted to invert a canister in an effort to sustain burner performance in cold conditions. This will cause liquid fuel to be ejected and can lead to an uncontrollable fire. ###
 EDIT: Unless the uncontrollable fire happened to you this is more projection. Maybe " The manufacturer warns that it should not be attempted to invert a canister in an effort to sustain burner performance in cold conditions. This will cause liquid fuel to be ejected and can lead to an uncontrollable fire,"
  
 ### The folding legs of the Xcelerator provide a stable base for the XTS pot in particular, but also provides ample stability for other pots and pans (within reason) too. ###
 EDIT: provide ["the legs . . . provide"]
  
 
 ### Stirring contents one handed while cooking is very stable, ###
 Edit: one-handed [with a hyphen]