Re: : Diameter SIP application -09

Hi:

With regard the Diamter SIP application -09, I got questions related to 
the apparent big number of changes in this last version. I will try to 
describe the need for them.

First the draft (version -08) was sent to the RFC Editor as part of the 
early-copy-edit experiment. The RFC Editor did quite a few editorial 
changes itself in the draft.

The RFC Editor also included three or four comments that resulted in 
quite a substantial number of editorial changes. These were the comments:

- The mixture for future and past tenses in the text is misleading and 
typically unjustified. So I went through the text and I avoided to use 
the future tense unless it was strictly necessary.

- Suggestion to add an introduction to each of the commands

"The Message Formats included in this document are defined as per ..."

Instead I added a general statement at the end of Section 7 reading:

    Sections defining commands contain the Message Format for that
    particular command.  The Message Formats included in this document
    are defined as per Section 3.2 of RFC 3588 [RFC3588].

and then I added one sentence per command, right before the message format:

    The Message Format of the UAR command is as follows:

This created also a number of changes because we have defined a few 
commands.

- The RFC Editor also suggested to avoid mentioning "ABNF" when 
referring to the syntax of Grouped AVPs, because if we mention ABNF, 
they will check that the ABNF syntax is correct according to the online 
tools. Since the Grouped AVPs ABNF expands on RFC 3588 and not on the 
base ABNF, this check will not pass (I tried myself). So I went over 
each of the grouped AVPS and wrote a reference to RFC3588 according to 
what the RFC Editor suggested.

    The SIP-Accounting-Information AVP is defined as follows (per the
    grouped-avp-def of RFC 3588 [RFC3588]):

Last, but not least, I fixed a couple of mistakes (see my initial e-mail 
below), use consistently "deregistration" rather than "de-registration", 
and pass the spell checker once more. This step also generated quite a 
few changes.

Best regards,

         Miguel

Miguel Garcia wrote:

> Hi:
> 
> I have just submitted a new version of the Diameter SIP application. 
> While the document appears in the official repository, you can download 
> a copy from:
> 
> http://people.nokia.net/~miguel/drafts/draft-ietf-aaa-diameter-sip-app-09.txt 
> 
> http://people.nokia.net/~miguel/drafts/draft-ietf-aaa-diameter-sip-app-09.html 
> 
> 
> This version of the draft mostly contains editorials due to a revision 
> that the RFC Editor did as part of the Early Copy-Editing experiment 
> (more information on that is available at http://ops.ietf.org/ece/
> 
> For your convenience, this is the list of changes:
> 
>    o  A number of editorial changes as suggested by the RFC Editor, as
>       part of the Early Copy Edit experiment.
>    o  Added reference to RFC 3588 to indicate that Message Formats in
>       commands and AVPs are based on the grammar defined in RFC 3588.
>    o  Fixed a bug in Section 5.9 that suggested a DE-REGISTRATION value
>       was possible for the SIP-Server-Assignment-Type AVP.  That value
>       does not exist.  Instead, there are a number of deregistration
>       values.
>    o  Some normative text in Section 7.10 was affecting the behaviour of
>       SIP servers, with respect subscriptions to the SIP "reg" event
>       package.  Since the SIP aspects are outside the scope of this
>       document, the text has been reworded in an informative way.
>    o  Added an informative reference to the SIP "reg" event package, RFC
>       3680.
> 
> I have also created two diff versions, one with respect -08 (published 
> on September 21st) and another with respect -07 (published in March 
> 18th), because I suspect that not many people had a chance to look at 
> -08. So if you didn't do it, you can track the changes with respect -07.
> 
> Diff 08 to 09:
> http://people.nokia.net/~miguel/drafts/draft-ietf-aaa-diameter-sip-app-08-to-09.html 
> 
> 
> Diff 07 to 09:
> http://people.nokia.net/~miguel/drafts/draft-ietf-aaa-diameter-sip-app-07-to-09.html 
> 
> 
> - Miguel
> 

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Miguel A. Garcia           tel:+358-50-4804586
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Nokia Research Center      Helsinki, Finland