: [AAA] Comments on Diameter SIP application

Hi, all:

 

I am sorry to see that the last day for providing comments (editorial)
had expired on September 24, 2005. Since comments are techno-editorial,
probably RFC editor might see those assuming that it might be helpful.

 

Techno-Editorial Comments on
http://people.nokia.net/~miguel/drafts/draft-ietf-aaa-diameter-sip-app-0
7-to-09-wide.html draft

 

1.	Title: Let us modify as "Diameter SIP Application." The reason
as follows: 

*         The word "...protocol-application .." does NOT sound correct.

*         Note: The word "... application-protocol .." makes sense, but
not the reverse one.

2.	Abstract: Change "Diameter Session Initiation Protocol (SIP)
Application" to "Diameter SIP Application." The reason is stated in item
1. Note: The following sentence has already spelled "SIP" as "Session
Initiation Protocol." 
3.	Section 3: Remove the 3rd paragraph because it is incomplete
when we see the 4th paragraph and replace it with the global statement
as follows:

*         "The Diameter SIP application is not related to and does not
require other Diameter applications."

4.	Figure 1: Within boxes put "SIP Server/Node" or "SIP Entity"
instead of only "SIP." Also put numbers like 1, 2, 3, ... etc. within
the boxes to be in consistent with texts written in describing Figure 1.
5.	Section 5.3: 4th Paragraph - In the end of 2nd sentence, add as
follows, .." with the help of Diameter server." This is due to the fact
that SIP server 1 cannot locate SIP server 2 all by itself unless
Diameter server provides the address of SIP server 2.
6.	Section 5.3: 4th Paragraph - Clarify by adding texts that "SIP
server 1 needs to find SIP server 2 to route the SIP call to the
destination."
7.	 Section 5.4: 9th Paragraph - Clarify by adding texts "What SIP
server 2 does if credentials are not valid."
8.	Sections 5.5 and 5.6: General comments - These sections show
only one SIP server in all figures where as the previous sections show
two SIP servers (edge, within network). Some clarifications need to be
added whether or not the Diameter message flows will be different if it
is edge SIP server or network-based SIP server.
9.	Section 5.10: 2nd Paragraph - Make it clear that "it is an
'assumption' that all information/profile/data related to one user
remains only in 'one' Diameter server." (Note: It may or may not always
be true for different implementation schemes of the large-scale network
where Diameter servers will deal with a variety of data. For example,
implementation may be such that all users of all applications including
SIP may only contact always a "single" logical Diameter server, but all
diameter servers will physically distributed across the entire network
for providing scalability enhancing performance.)

 

Best regards,

Radhika