Some editorial nits on the model draft
McCann Peter-A001034 <[email protected]> Mon, 7 Jan 2008 16:06:47 -0500
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There are a few misplaced angle brackets in the document.
Section 4.5.6: >alias> SHOULD BE <alias>
Section 4.7: < version> SHOULD BE <version>
<LFBClassDef< SHOULD BE <LFBClassDef>
Section 4.7.2: <inputPort > SHOULD BE <inputPort>
< expectation> SHOULD BE <expectation>
<inputPorts< SHOULD BE <inputPorts>
Throughout the document:
REPLACE "a metadata" with "a metadatum"
Section 4.7.2:
ot the corresponding <ref> element
SHOULD BE:
of the corresponding <ref> element
Section 4.7.3: < outputPort> SHOULD BE <outputPort>
Section 4.7.6.1:
ealier
SHOULD BE:
earlier
The example event Gah10field1 illustrates the
how the column
SHOULD BE:
The example event Gah10field1 illustrates
how the column
Section 4.7.6.3:
then
the The report MUST use a protocol format
SHOULD BE:
then
the report MUST use a protocol format
Section 4.8.5.2:
< eventLessThan/>
SHOULD BE:
<eventLessThan/>
o For a <eventGreaterThan/> condition with threshold T, once the
event has been generated at least once it MUST NOT be generated
again until the field first becomes less than or equal to T - -V,
and then exceeds T.
Did you mean to say "T - V" here? "T - -V" is technically "T + V".
Section 8:
show how a data plain LFB might be build.
SHOULD BE:
show how a data plane LFB might be built.
interface carry Frame Relay traffic.
SHOULD BE:
interface that carries Frame Relay traffic.
Section 8.1:
useful statistics. But it serves
SHOULD BE:
useful statistics, but it serves
are sent as meta- data,
SHOULD BE:
are sent as metadata,
Section 8.4:
Once common
SHOULD BE:
One common