Re: [IPFIX] review of draft-ietf-ipfix-mib-variable-export-07
Paul Aitken <[email protected]> Tue, 6 Jan 2015 11:39:38 +0100
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Juergen, I don't usually follow examples since I'm usually wondering what happens if I *don't* do what it says... However I'll change the example for the sake of those who do. Thanks, P. > -----Original Message----- > From: Juergen Schoenwaelder [mailto:[email protected]] > Sent: 05 January 2015 15:20 > To: Paul Aitken > Cc: [email protected] > Subject: Re: [IPFIX] review of draft-ietf-ipfix-mib-variable-export-07 > > Paul, > > I think the example should either be a real-world example or there needs to be a > clear warning somewhere that this example is not a real-world example in order > to prevent people from coding along the example and then coming up with ideas > such as white space padding interface names to make them fixed-length 16 > octets long. There are programmers who code along examples instead of > reading the underlying specifications and they sometimes end up being (too) > creative. > > I guess my preference is to show a realistic example but if I am the only one, > then of course I will go along with what we have (but I would appreciate that > there is a warning somewhere that this example makes simplifying assumptions). > > /js > > On Mon, Jan 05, 2015 at 11:09:14AM +0100, Paul Aitken wrote: > > Juergen, thanks for your careful review and all your feedback. I've addressed > all your points except one: > > > > - p46: Why is the Field Length of mibObjectValueOctetString set to 16? > > The interface names in general have variable length. > > > > Fixed length is used to simplify the example data record in figure 31. > > > > Although interfaces generally do have variable length names, I believe the > example is clearer with fixed length fields. > > > > Changing to variable length would be straightforward if the consensus is that > it's more realistic example. > > > > P. > > > > > > > -----Original Message----- > > > From: IPFIX [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Juergen > > > Schoenwaelder > > > Sent: 17 December 2014 14:19 > > > To: [email protected] > > > Subject: [IPFIX] review of draft-ietf-ipfix-mib-variable-export-07 > > > > > > Hi, > > > > > > here is my review of draft-ietf-ipfix-mib-variable-export-07. Most > > > of the comments are editorial or bug fixes. There is only one real > > > technical concern related to the encoding of BITS. The current I-D > > > uses a 64-bit unsigned integer, which limits things to 64 bit > > > positions. The SMIv2 does not have this limit - it only warns about bit > positions in excess of 128. > > > > > > - RFC4293 is listed as a normative reference but as far as I can tell > > > it is only used in an example. I suggest to make this an informative > > > reference. > > > > > > - p3: 2nd paragraph Introduction: I am not sure the statement "there > > > are no dependencies between the SMIv2 and the SNMP protocol" is > > > correct. Perhaps the simplest fix is to simply delete the whole > > > paragraph. > > > > > > - p4: 1st paragraph Motivation: The 2nd sentence is hard to follow. > > > > > > - p5: s/does not specify SNMP notifications/does not specify how to > > > carry SNMP notifications in IPFIX/ > > > > > > - p9: s/in a certain MIB/in a certain MIB module/ > > > > > > - p10: s/may be also be/may also be/ > > > > > > - p10: s/described by the MIB./described by the MIB module./ > > > > > > - p14: s/when when/when/ > > > > > > - p14: s/references sections/referenced sections/ > > > > > > The fact that every listed item refers to two sections may be a bit > > > confusing, perhaps change to > > > > > > o mibIndexIndicator (defined in Section 5.8.5, example in Section > > > 11.2.2.3) > > > > > > - p20: It took me a while to spot the difference between Fig. 7 and > > > Fig.8 (I did not immediately spot that the fields are > > > swapped). Perhaps mention this more explicitly in the last paragraph > > > on p19? > > > > > > Figure 7 shows an IPFIX Options Template Set using Scope Existing > > > IFPIX IE and a Non Scope mibObjectValueInteger IE, while Figure 8 > > > shows an IPFIX Options Template Set using a Scope > > > mibObjectValueInteger IE and a Non Scope Existing IFPIX IE. > > > > > > - p12: s/name of the MIB/name of the MIB module/ > > > > > > - p26: s/present the same order/present in the same order/ > > > > > > - p32: s/not defined as possible/not possible/ > > > > > > - p37: s/CISCO-PROCESS_MIB/CISCO-PROCESS-MIB/ > > > > > > - p45: s/ifMTU/ifMtu/ (this shows up several time, do a global > > > replace) > > > > > > - p46: Why is the Field Length of mibObjectValueOctetString set to 16? > > > The interface names in general have variable length. > > > > > > - p47: why 'ifName = ""'? > > > > > > - p52: s/index by IEs:/indexed by IEs:/ > > > > > > - p58: The VLEN and the OID value seem to be wrong. I think this should > > > be VLEN=10 and the OID value 06082B060102010E0A01. > > > > > > - p61: I would have named SNMPtotalCounter simply snmpCounter and I > > > would have named SNMPgauge snmpGauge. If this change is > > > adopted, then these names needs to be changed in several > > > places. > > > > > > - p64: The encoding of mibObjectValueBits may need to specify how the > > > bit positions are counted. That said, there is an issue here > > > with using unsigned64. RFC 2578 does not restrict the bit > > > positions, it only warns that using bit positions in excess of > > > 128 may cause interoperability problems. The IPFIX I-D > > > essentially limits this to 64 bits. The obvious solution is to > > > follow the SNMP encoding rules that encode bits into an octet > > > string (an octetArray in IPFIX speak). > > > > > > - p67: s/as defined in a MIB// > > > > > > - p68: OLD > > > > > > Description: A non-negative sub-identifier. One Sub number from > > > an Object Identifier (OID). > > > > > > NEW > > > > > > Description: A non-negative sub-identifier of an Object > > > Identifier (OID). > > > > > > - p69: s/was retrieved from SNMP/was retrieved from the MIB/ > > > > > > - p70: s/could be sampled by SNMP/has been sampled/ > > > > > > - p70: s/SNMP sampling time/sampling time/ > > > > > > /js > > > > > > -- > > > Juergen Schoenwaelder Jacobs University Bremen gGmbH > > > Phone: +49 421 200 3587 Campus Ring 1, 28759 Bremen, Germany > > > Fax: +49 421 200 3103 <http://www.jacobs-university.de/> > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > > IPFIX mailing list > > > [email protected] > > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ipfix > > -- > Juergen Schoenwaelder Jacobs University Bremen gGmbH > Phone: +49 421 200 3587 Campus Ring 1, 28759 Bremen, Germany > Fax: +49 421 200 3103 <http://www.jacobs-university.de/> _______________________________________________ IPFIX mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ipfix