Re: #42 [-] Wording

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On Wed, 2005-05-11 at 02:18, KAMADA Ken'ichi wrote:
> # I know such a subtle English matter is beyond me...
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> At Wed, 11 May 2005 17:28:58 +0900,
> Shoichi Sakane <[email protected]> wrote:
> >=20
> > >>#42 [-] Wording
> > >>(waiting a revision)
> > >>
> > >>	Section 4.3, discussing attributes, mixes singular and plural
> > >>	indications.
> >=20
> > If Ken indicated the following sentence;
> >=20
> >    The initiator MUST check to see if the optimistic payload was select=
ed by
> >    comparing all transforms and attributes which MUST be identical from
> >    the initiator's optimistic proposal with the lone exception of
> >    LIFE_KILOBYTES and LIFE_SECONDS.
> >=20
> > then I think that the original text in the section 4.3 is nearly correc=
t.
> > because a single proposal can contain multiple transforms, for example,
> > using both ESP and AH.  and regardless of that, a transform can contain
> > multiple attributes.
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> I agree that this is just a wording issue.
> How about this:
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>    The initiator MUST check to see if the optimistic payload was
>    selected by comparing all transforms and attributes which MUST be
>    identical from those in the initiator's optimistic proposal with the l=
one
>                   ~~~~~~~~
>    exception of LIFE_KILOBYTES and LIFE_SECONDS.  Each of these
>                                                   ~~~~
>    attributes MAY be set to a lower value by the respondent and still
>    expect optimistic keying, but MUST NOT be set to a higher value which
>    MUST generate an error.

Good except: s/lone exception/exceptions

I'm not sure it's an error though: what does IKE do in this
case?


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>=20
> > >>                    The word "lone" appears to be popular with the au=
thor,
> > >>	too. :-)  (Ken Raeburn)

Not any more... I've moved on :-)=20

		Mike

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