Re: [kitten] Fwd: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15.txt

Hi Leif,

Thanks for updating this.

On 01/14/2013 08:40 AM, Leif Johansson wrote:
> 
> 
> As promised - since there were no protests about the new non-RFC2119
> language
> I've submitted -15.
> 
> *Please comment*

I think the top of section 2 does need a minor tweak. It currently
says:

   The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
   "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in this
   document are to be interpreted as described in [RFC2119].

   This document uses the standard normative key words ("MUST", "MUST
   NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT", "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT",
   "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL") but does not reference
   [RFC2119].  The reason for this (which was discussed extensively in
   the kerberos WG) is as follows:

Two things there: 1) the first and 2nd paragraphs contradict one
another, and 2) "does not reference [RFC2119]" is itself wonderfully
self-contradictory:-)

I'd suggest changing to:

   This document uses the standard key words ("MUST", "MUST
   NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT", "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT",
   "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL") that are defined in
   [RFC2119] but with modifications to those definitions as
   described below. The reason for this (which was discussed
   extensively in the kerberos WG) is as follows:

And a typo has snuck in as well: s/inforsmation/information/

Other than that, I think this version is fine. (I'll ask Pete
if he agrees as well.)

Cheers,
S.



> 
>             Cheers Leif
> 
> -------- Original Message --------
> Subject: 	New Version Notification for draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15.txt
> Date: 	Mon, 14 Jan 2013 00:39:24 -0800
> From: 	[email protected]
> To: 	[email protected]
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> A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15.txt
> has been successfully submitted by Leif Johansson and posted to the
> IETF repository.
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> Filename:	 draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model
> Revision:	 15
> Title:		 An information model for Kerberos version 5
> Creation date:	 2013-01-14
> WG ID:		 krb-wg
> Number of pages: 18
> URL:             http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15.txt
> Status:          http://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model
> Htmlized:        http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15
> Diff:            http://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-krb-wg-kdc-model-15
> 
> Abstract:
>    This document describes an information model for Kerberos version 5
>    from the point of view of an administrative service.  There is no
>    standard for administrating a kerberos 5 KDC.  This document
>    describes the services exposed by an administrative interface to a
>    KDC.
> 
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