Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-l2tpext-keyed-ipv6-tunnel-07: (with COMMENT)

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draft-ietf-l2tpext-keyed-ipv6-tunnel-07: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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I have just a few minor comments:

- 1, 2nd paragraph: The first sentence is convoluterd; can it be
simplified?

-- "upon receipt on each tunnel": on receipt of packets?

-6: Please expand OAM, MEP, and MIP on first mention.

-11.2: RFCs 1981, 4623, 4720, 5085. 5883, and 5885 are all cited in the
context of 2119 language. They should probably be normative references.
(In my opinion, even citations for optional features need normative
references if they are needed to fully understand the features.)