Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26

Hi Paul,

Thanks for your review! Please see inline.


>I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the
>IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other
>last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at
><​http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>
>Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26
>Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
>Review Date: 2017-07-07
>IETF LC End Date: 2017-07-24
>IESG Telechat date: TBD
>
>Summary:
>
>This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a few nits that
>should be fixed before publication.
>
>Issues:
>
>Major: 0
>Minor: 0
>Nits:  4
>
>(1) NIT:
>
>Section 5.3: s/Eventhough/Even though/

Will be fixed.

>(2) NIT:
>
>Section 8: s/aTLS/a TLS/

Will be fixed.

>(3) NIT:
>
>Section 8: What is the point of including the example? I don't see how
>it adds anything. Perhaps worked out O/A examples contrasting the
>differences between the new and existing cases might be marginally
>helpful. (But IMO not enough to bother with.)

The idea was to take the existing example from RFC 4572 (I note the
reference is wrong: s/3261/4572), and show how it looks with the tls-id
attribute.


>(4) NIT:
>
>Section 10.3.2: s/Througout/throughout/

Will be fixed.

Regards,

Christer

_______________________________________________
mmusic mailing list
[email protected]
https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/mmusic