[DMM] Re: draft-ietf-dmm-tn-aware-mobility-12 - Review reque st

Hi John, all,

This version looks better. Please see below some quick comments:

* I still think that a pointer to draft-ietf-teas-5g-ns-ip-mpls-13#name-5g-network-slicing-integrat would be helpful to add in your Section 2.1. I know that you already cite that doc, but that citation is specific to QoS mapping.
* fix the formatting of Figure 4
* I would remove figure 5, but if you maintain it please (a) fix the indent of the first line and (b) also fix this part to indicate the location of your extension

OLD:
                       |  +--rw (l3-service)?
                       |     +--:(l3-tunnel-service)
                       |        +--rw l3-tunnel-service
                       |           +--rw type?   identityref
                       |             +--rw (ietf-ac-gtpu)?

NEW
                       |  +--rw (l3-service)?
                       |     +--:(l3-tunnel-service)
                       |        +--rw l3-tunnel-service
                       |           +--rw type?   identityref
                       |           <--ietf-ac-gtpu extenstion-->

* Add a note to the RFC editor to replace "RFC SSSS" with the RFC number to be assigned to I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit
* List I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit and RFC8519 as normative. I think that RFC9543 has to be cited as normative as well.
* The IANA considerations should be updated as follows:

OLD:
This document has no requests for IANA code point allocations.

NEW:
    IANA is requested to register the following URI in the "ns"
    subregistry within the "IETF XML Registry" [RFC3688]:

       URI: urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-ac-gtpu
       Registrant Contact:  The IESG.
       XML: N/A; the requested URI is an XML namespace.

    IANA is requested to register the following YANG module in the "YANG
    Module Names" subregistry [RFC6020] within the "YANG Parameters"
    registry.

       Name: ietf-ac-gtpu
       Maintained by IANA?  N
       Namespace: urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-ac-gtpu

       Prefix: ac-gtpu
       Reference: RFC XXXX

* Update the security considerations to follow the template at https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis-20#name-security-considerations-sect

Hope this helps.

Cheers,
Med

De : Kaippallimalil John <[email protected]>
Envoyé : mardi 12 novembre 2024 22:26
À : Sri Gundavelli (sgundave) <[email protected]>; [email protected]
Cc : [email protected]; [email protected]
Objet : [OPSAWG]Re: draft-ietf-dmm-tn-aware-mobility-12 - Review request

Hi all,

For the dmm reviews, please use version 13 that we just posted.

The revision was to align with the new revision of I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit that already provides the model for l3-service and l3-tunnel-service.



This new version also has a complete Yang model for ietf-ac-gtpu that was generated and compiled for accuracy  - Thanks, Med!

Please see the revisions in Diff below, or sectios 4.1 and 4.2.



Best Regards,

John


Links from the submission:

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Name:     draft-ietf-dmm-tn-aware-mobility

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Title:    Mobility-aware Transport Network Slicing for 5G

Date:     2024-11-12

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From: Sri Gundavelli (sgundave) <[email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>>
Sent: Thursday, November 7, 2024 7:51 AM
To: [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>
Subject: [DMM] draft-ietf-dmm-tn-aware-mobility-12 - Review request

All:

This document, draft-ietf-dmm-tn-aware-mobility, went through several revisions. Authors have presented the details on the latest changes. Please review and provide your feedback. If all the technical issues are resolved, we will issue LC.

Sri



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