[art] Artart last call review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-delstid-06

Reviewer: Henry Thompson
Review result: Ready with Issues

Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-delstid-06
Intended RFC status: Proposed Standard
Review type: artart - Last Call review
Reviewer: Henry S. Thompson
Review Date: 2024-08-26
Result: Ready with minor issues

*Summary*

*Substantive points*

*Minor points*

Section 2.1: Probably worth mentioning that the 'CODE' shown here is
defined per RFC 4506.

Section 4: "The open stateid field, OPEN4resok.stateid ..., will MUST
            be set to the special all zero"

There's a typo here, and in any case I _think_ it should be expanded
slightly for clarity:

  "The open stateid field, OPEN4resok.stateid ..., MUST be set
   to the special all zero in this case."

Section 4.1: I'm not familiar with the implementation details of NFS,
but I find this discussion difficult to follow.  Perhaps it would help
if it were expanded to show what the two compounds sequences look like
for the two different values of
OPEN_ARGS_SHARE_ACCESS_WANT_OPEN_XOR_DELEGATION.

Section 5: As far as the protocol itself is concerned, this section
looks OK to me, but the mixture of BCP14 keywords and ordinary
language to describe the correct _use_ of the protocol with respect to
the various times involved is quite confusing, and would benefit from
a more structure, in the form of an analysis by cases.
  
*Nits*

Section 3: "Note that as these flags MUST only change from OPTIONAL
to REQUIRED when the NFSv4 minor version is incremented" --- something
wrong with the grammar here, possibly just delete "as".

Section 6: I think "the that" should be just "that", but you may
possibly have meant just "the".

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