Re: AD evaluation of draft-ietf-nsis-ntlp-statemechine-08

Thank you,

A great improvement. I will now start IETF last call on this.

Magnus

Xiaoming Fu skrev 2010-02-12 12:06:
> Hi Magnus,
> 
> We have updated the ID according to your comments, with the following 
> changes:
> 1. TXT diagrams added
> 2. Description of transitions improved
> 3. Transitions' numbering re-ordered for better reading
> 4. TXT tables touched to follow the model: transition->details
> 
> The new version can be found in:
> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-nsis-ntlp-statemachine-09.txt
> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-nsis-ntlp-statemachine-09.pdf
> 
> Diff from previous version:
> http://tools.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-nsis-ntlp-statemachine-09
> 
> Many thanks again for your helpful suggestions!
> 
> Best regards,
> Xiaoming
> 
> Magnus Westerlund wrote:
>> Hi,
>>
>> I have reviewed the GIST state machine document and have the following
>> comment:
>>
>> Can't the text version be imporved in relation to the state diagram?
>> Couldn't the state and the transitions be included in a figure with only
>> the note numbers on the transitions. Then include the tables below them,
>> at least making the text version somewhat usable.
>>
>> As currently written I don't think the document fulfill IETF's rules on
>> making the text version the authoritative one. As it is very hard to
>> understand the text version.
>>
>> Cheers
>>
>> Magnus Westerlund
>>
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