[openpgp] Gorry Fairhurst's No Objection on draft-ietf-openp gp-pqc-14: (with COMMENT)

Gorry Fairhurst has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-openpgp-pqc-14: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thanks for preparing this document.

Please could you look at the following comments and resolve in the next
revision:

1) Please reword "we..." in 2 places, because the IETF is the publisher:
"We refer to Section 10.1..." to something like: "Please see Section 10.1..."
"In this section we define the encryption..." to something like "This sectio
defines the encryption..."

2) This text seems like it has too many "to"s for easy reading:
...MAY by default encrypt to both to avoid disruption to communications...

3) I feel slightly uncomfortable reading, could this be reworded?:
"This means that all component signatures must be verified
successfully in order to achieve"
- Using "in order" within a sentence can result in ambiguity about whether this
implies ordered processing of the signatures.



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