[pim] draft-ietf-pim-updt-ipv6-dyn-mcast-addr-grp-id-07 ietf l ast call Secdir review

Document: draft-ietf-pim-updt-ipv6-dyn-mcast-addr-grp-id
Title: Updates to Dynamic IPv6 Multicast Address Group IDs
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready

I reviewed this document as part of the Security Directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Security Area
Directors.  Document authors, document editors, and WG chairs should
treat these comments just like any other IETF Last Call comments.

Document:  	draft-ietf-pim-updt-ipv6-dyn-mcast-addr-grp-id-07
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2025-11-24
IETF LC End Date: 2025-11-28
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready


Major Concerns:  None


Minor Concerns:

Section 3:  This document point to RFC 3307, and RFC 3307 point to
RFC 2908 for a more in-depth discussion of the security issues
surrounding dynamic allocation of multicast addresses.  Be kind to
the reader and include the pointer to RFC 2908 here.


Nits:

Abstract: s/Describes/This document describes/

Abstract: s/Recommends/This document recommends/

Abstract: s/Suggests/This document suggests/

Section 2: s/[RFC3307], Section 4.3/Section 4.3 of [RFC3307]/ (twice)

Section 2: s/[RFC4291], Section 2.7.1/Section 2.7.1 of [RFC4291]/

Table 2: s/[RFC4291], Section 2.7.1/Section 2.7.1 of [RFC4291]/

Section 5: In the first paragraph "this research" is very unclear.  Since
this document is about address allocation, I would hope there is something
associated with the document that can be said.

Section 5: s/draft/document/



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