RE: QPIM

Joel,
How about the following text:

"Abstract

This document presents an object-oriented information model for 
representing QoS network management policies. This document is based on
the IETF Policy Core Information Model and its extensions. It defines an
information model for QoS enforcement for differentiated and integrated
services using policy. 
It is important to note that this document defines an information model,
which by definition is independent of any particular data storage
mechanism and access protocol..."

We believe it solves the problem Russ had with the previous wording.

If this acceptable, we would resubmit a fixed version, immediately.

Thanks, 
Yoram

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Joel M. Halpern [mailto:[email protected]] 
> Sent: Thursday, July 17, 2003 3:55 AM
> To: [email protected]
> Subject: [Policy] QPIM
> 
> 
> I have met with Russ Housley about this document.
> The abstract as written is somewhat confusing.
> We refer to "model for representing policies that administer, 
> manage, and 
> control access to network QoS resources."  This prompts the 
> reader to look 
> for explicit access control mechanisms, and all the associated 
> paraphernalia, which of course are not pleasant.
> 
> I believe this can be addressed by a small change to the abstract / 
> introduction to indicate that what is provided are models of 
> mechanisms 
> that can be used by access control, or models of information 
> that is used 
> by access control mechanisms.
> 
> If we can find some reasonable words to change in the abstract and 
> introduction, I will see if they address the problem, and 
> with luck we can 
> have them handled as RFC editor instructions.
> 
> I would like to hear from the document authors on this, please.
> 
> Yours,
> Joel M. Halpern
> 
> PS: We are waiting on some other comments, so this may not be 
> the last issue.
> 
> PPS: QDDIM has some purely editorial comments so far, and it is also 
> waiting on some other comments.
> 
> 
> 
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