Re: [Pals] WG last call for draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-04

Hi Yuanlong

Thank you for your comments. Please see inline.


On 08/04/2018 12:35, Jiangyuanlong wrote:
>
> Hi Andy,
>
> I have read the latest draft and support its publication.
>
> However, there are some minor editorial comments or suggestions you 
> may consider:
>
> 1.In the “Abstract” and “Introduction”, “RFC4448” should be replaced 
> with “RFC 4448” or "[RFC4448]";
>
Done

> 2.In the “Introduction”, replace “based of” with “based on”; replace 
> “deployment of equipment” with “deployment of equipments”; the first 
> ‘ECMP’ is not expanded while the 2^nd is fully expanded;
>
Done except equipment which after consulting a couple of dictionaries I 
will leave to the RFC Editor to decide.

> 3.In the “Introduction”, “about 1/8 of the time” may be replaced with 
> “about 1/8 in statistics”;
>
I have reworded to

"Random assignment results in addresses starting with one of these two 
values
one time in eight."

The only time when it is not exactly 1 in 8 is when the RNG is biased.

> 4.In Section 3 “Background”, “more complex, proprietary, methods” can 
> be replaced with “more complex and proprietary methods”;
>

I think the original is correct, but if I am wrong the RFC Editor will 
pick it up.

> 5.In Section 4 “Recommendation”, “a Ethernet PW” shall be “an Ethernet 
> PW”; remove one ‘both’ from “both both”;
>
Done

> 6.In Section 4 “Recommendation”, “if ELI/EL is used then it should be 
> used on every segment of the PW” where “should” can be capitalized, as 
> this is a recommendation IMO;
>
Done

> 7.In Section 5 “Equal Cost Multi-path (ECMP)”, insert “are” to “In 
> both cases there considerations” behind ‘there’;
>
Done

> 8.In Section 6 “Mitigations”, insert ')' after “[RFC3209]”;
>
Done

> 9.In Section 7 “Operational Considerations”, ‘emits’ should be ‘emit’;
>

I think "emits" is OK. The RFC Editor will catch it if I am wrong.

Thanks

Stewart

> Thanks,
>
> Yuanlong
>
> *From:*Pals [mailto:[email protected]] *On Behalf Of *Andrew G. Malis
> *Sent:* Wednesday, March 21, 2018 4:24 PM
> *To:* [email protected]
> *Cc:* [email protected]; BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A (ATTLABS)
> *Subject:* [Pals] WG last call for draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-04
>
> Having heard from the authors regarding IPR, it’s now time to start WG 
> last call for https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-04 .
>
> As a reminder, since our two WG co-chairs are also co-authors on this 
> draft, Matthew Bocci, former PWE3 co-chair, has kindly volunteered to 
> act as document shepherd for the draft, and will be in charge of 
> determining consensus on the document and also managing the last call 
> review process.
>
> As the IETF meeting is now in progress, this will be a three-week last 
> call, ending Wednesday April 11. Please send comments and reviews to 
> [email protected] <mailto:[email protected]> . Also, indications that the 
> draft has been read and is (or isn’t) ready for publication would also 
> be appreciated. If you feel that that draft isn’t yet ready for 
> publication, please include your reasons and suggested improvements.
>
> Thanks,
>
> Andy
>
>
>
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