Re: AD comments on draft-ietf-rmt-bb-norm-revised-03

Thanks Magnus,

I will provide an updated draft ASAP.



At 3:45 PM +0100 3/19/08, Magnus Westerlund wrote:
>Hi,
>
>I did my AD review of the draft and have only one real comment:
>
>I think the security section is not particular well describing the 
>security issues. Especially with bad guys that are authenticated but 
>still are badly behaving. I think expanding it somewhat and try to 
>separate the potential solutions from the problems. And also address 
>when the solutions are only partial solutions.
>
>
>
>Nits:
>Section 1: I think you should break the paragraph with RFC 2119 
>language at the end into two.
>
>Statement of intention, first paragraph: There is a stray space 
>before the "." in the second sentence.
>
>On many places the document uses "_"word to be underlined"_" 
>construct. They are not approved embellishments to use in RFCs, so 
>please change them.
>
>I am expecting an updated draft.
>
>Cheers
>
>Magnus Westerlund
>
>IETF Transport Area Director & TSVWG Chair
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