Re: New version (-04) of draft-ietf-sip-199

Last sentence in 3rd paragraph in Sec 1:


"When SIP entities upstream receive the first 2xx final response, and they do not to intend to accept

subsequent 2xx final responses, they will automatically terminate other associated outstanding early

dialogs. If additional 2xx final responses are received, for INVITE initiated dialogs those SIP

entities will normally send a BYE request using the dialog identifier retrieved from the subsequent

2xx final response."

since the context is 199 and early dialogs, do we need the reference to INV or can we simplify say  :


"If additional 2xx final responses are received, they will send a BYE request using the dialog identifier retrieved from the subsequent

2xx final response"

Sec 4.1, last sentence, readability is better if modified as :

"...if a 199 response is received for that early dialog, client terminates it. Afterwards, client SHOULD act as before the first early dialog as established


Other nits:
Sec 1 and 4, decissions -> decisions
Sec4, dialogusage -> dialog usage
          desribed -> described
Sec 4.1example 6, diaogs ->dialogs
Sec 4.2, announcement -> announcement
Sec 6, immedialetly > immediately
           occurred -> occurred
           received -> received
           reliably  -> reliably
           prxy -> proxy
Sec 7, compability -> compatibility

Thanks,
Serhad

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From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Christer Holmberg
Sent: Wednesday, January 07, 2009 12:49 AM
To: [email protected]
Subject: [Sip] New version (-04) of draft-ietf-sip-199



Hi,

Based on comments and discussions, I've submitted a new version of the 199 draft.

The currently remaining to-do is to add text to the security chapter.

The draft can also be found at:

http://users.piuha.net/cholmber/drafts/draft-ietf-sip-199-04.txt

Regards,

Christer

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