Re: New version (-04) of draft-ietf-sip-199

Hi Serhad,

>Last sentence in 3rd paragraph in Sec 1:
>
>"When SIP entities upstream receive the first 2xx final response, and
they do not to intend to accept 
>subsequent 2xx final responses, they will automatically terminate other
associated outstanding early 
>dialogs. If additional 2xx final responses are received, for INVITE
initiated dialogs those SIP
>entities will normally send a BYE request using the dialog identifier
retrieved from the subsequent
>2xx final response."
>
>since the context is 199 and early dialogs, do we need the reference to
INV or can we simplify say  :
>
>"If additional 2xx final responses are received, they will send a BYE
request using the dialog identifier retrieved from the subsequent
>2xx final response"

Looks ok.

>Sec 4.1, last sentence, readability is better if modified as :
>
>"...if a 199 response is received for that early dialog, client
terminates it. Afterwards, client SHOULD act as before the first early
dialog as established

Ok. So, the new text would be something like (with some minor additional
editorials):	 

"If the client only has a single early dialog (other early dialogs MAY
not have been established, or they MAY have been established and
later terminated) and a 199 response is received for that early
dialog, the client terminates it. Afterwards, the client after 
the client SHOULD act as before the first early dialog
was established."

	 
>Other nits:
>
>Sec 1 and 4, decissions -> decisions
>
>Sec4, dialogusage -> dialog usage
>
>desribed -> described
>
>Sec 4.1example 6, diaogs ->dialogs
>
>Sec 4.2, announcement -> announcement
>
>Sec 6, immedialetly > immediately
>
>occurred -> occurred
>
>received -> received
>
>reliably  -> reliably
>
>prxy -> proxy
>
>Sec 7, compability -> compatibility

I'll fix those.

Thank You for the comments! :)

Regards,

Christer
	 

	 

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	Sent: Wednesday, January 07, 2009 12:49 AM
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	Subject: [Sip] New version (-04) of draft-ietf-sip-199

	 

	 

	Hi, 

	Based on comments and discussions, I've submitted a new version
of the 199 draft. 

	The currently remaining to-do is to add text to the security
chapter. 

	The draft can also be found at: 

	http://users.piuha.net/cholmber/drafts/draft-ietf-sip-199-04.txt
<http://users.piuha.net/cholmber/drafts/draft-ietf-sip-199-04.txt>  

	Regards, 

	Christer 

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