Re: I-D Action:draft-ietf-sipping-nat-scenarios-13.txt

Frank Shearar <[email protected]> Mon, 14 Jun 2010 20:53:37 +0200
Newsgroups gmane.ietf.sipping
Message-ID <[email protected]>
On 2010/06/14 20:26, Fabio Margarido wrote:
> On Sat, Jun 12, 2010 at 05:55, Frank Shearar
> <[email protected]>  wrote:
>> "The first is when using a reliable, connection orientated transport
>> protocol such as TCP, SIP has an inherent mechanism ..." rewrite as:
>>
>> "The first is that when SIP uses a reliable, connection orientated transport
>> protocol such as TCP, it has an inherent mechanism ...
>
> Shouldn't it be "The first is when using a reliable, connection
> oriented transport (...)"?

Well, I had to reread that sentence a number of times before I could 
figure out the structure, never mind what it was saying.

Looking at my suggestion again, perhaps this is an improvement:

The first is when SIP uses a reliable, connection orientated transport 
protocol such as TCP. In this case, SIP has an inherent mechanism ...

and then start the last sentence of the paragraph like so:

The second case is when SIP uses an unreliable transport protocol such 
as UDP, where ...

frank
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