Bug#781058: www.debian.org: Update HP info in partners/index.wml page

Laura Arjona Reina <[email protected]> Thu, 26 Mar 2015 20:10:14 +0100

Newsgroups	gmane.linux.debian.devel.www
Message-ID	<55145996.9030400__26577.9324029156$1427397340$gmane$org@larjona.net>

Hi

El 24/03/15 a las 02:18, Paul Wise escribió:
> On Tue, Mar 24, 2015 at 5:50 AM, Laura Arjona Reina wrote:
> 
>> I'm attaching a patch with the new paragraph about HP.
> 
> I found the wording confusing, as it is missing "has provided".

Yes. Fixed in the attached patch.

> 
> I'd also replace "HP hardware donations" with "current HP hardware donations".
> 
> Please also indent the second paragraph as it was before.
> 
Done.

I'm attaching a new patch that I hope it's ok.
Regards
-- 
Laura Arjona
https://wiki.debian.org/LauraArjona

index.wml.diff (text/x-patch, 1.6 KB)

--- /home/larjona/Documentos/l10n/Debian/webwml/english/partners/index.wml
+++ /home/larjona/Documentos/l10n/Debian/webwml/english/partners/index.new.wml
@@ -28,16 +28,16 @@
   <div>
     <partnerlogo "Hewlett-Packard" hp.gif "http://www.hp.com/">
     <partnerdesc>
-      <p><a href="http://www.hp.com/">Hewlett-Packard</a> has provided several
-      high-end HPPA, IA-64 and IA-32 servers and workstations to Debian,
-      and HP employs several developers to work on Debian HPPA and IA-64
-      ports. For information about HP's involvement in the Linux Open Source
+      <p><a href="http://www.hp.com/">Hewlett-Packard</a> has provided hardware for port development, 
+      Debian mirrors, and other Debian services (HP hardware donations are listed in 
+      the <a href="https://db.debian.org/machines.cgi">Debian machines</a> page). 
+      For information about HP's involvement in the Linux Open Source
       community, see <a href="http://www.hp.com/products1/linux/">HP Linux</a>.</p>
-
-      <p>HP is one of the largest computer companies in the world, and it
-      provides a wide range of products and services, such as all kinds of
-      PCs, calculators, printers, scanners, plotters, various storage
-      products, network servers and equipment, software etc.</p>
+     
+      <p>Hewlett-Packard  is one of the largest computer companies in the
+      world, providing a wide range of products and services, such as
+      servers, PCs, printers, storage products, network equipment, software,
+      cloud computing solutions, etc.</p>
     </partnerdesc>
   </div>

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