Re: [needs translation / needs proofreading] SFP032

I have proofread the webpreview, and attach a version with my suggestions.
My file is generated from the xhtml from the webpreview, but in .odt format
to get the benefit of highlighting my suggestions with the LibreOffice Track
Changes feature.

1.  "talk about Router Freedom, our work to protect freedom of choice
regarding internet devices."  Replace the comma with "and."  There are two
subjects of the discussion described:  the concept of Router Freedom and
the work done by the FSFE in support of that concept.  With the comma in
place, the sentence says that Router Freedom is the work that the FSFE is
doing.  Surely the concept and the work are different, although -- as with
the link at the beginning of the next paragraph, the FSFE uses the phrase
"Router Freedom" as the name of one of its initiatives.

2.  "Lately this freedom was threatened by the largest telecom provider in
Germany - however the Bundesnetzargentur ruled in favour of Router Freedom
<https://fsfe.org/news/2025/news-20250124-01.html> and thereby safeguarding
the freedom of choice in Germany."

(a)  I suggest replacing "and" with a comma.  An equally good alternative
would be to replace "safeguarding" with "safeguarded."  This alternative
makes "safeguarding" parallel to "ruled."  My suggestion retains
"safeguarding" but conforms the grammar.

(b)  Remove the last occurrence of "the" (before "freedom).  English usage.

3.  "how it connects back in history to the Cold War, in the 50s,"  I am
not suggesting a change, since I have not listened to the podcast.
However, I remember -- and want to point out, since my memory may go back
farther than that of many people on the Translators List -- that the Cold
War was underway in the late 1940s.  I am not suggesting a change because I
trust that the references to the Cold War in the podcast are to events of
the 1950s, rather than in the earliest years of the Cold War.

4.  "Show notes"   This heading is ambiguous.  I cannot even tell whether
"Show" is a noun used as an adjective saying that these are notes relating
to a show, the podcast, or whether "Show" is a verb indicating that the
list that follows displays interesting facts.  My suggestion is to replace
this heading with "Here is more information".  [This sort of ambiguity is
all too common in English.  A classic example is the very non-parallel
sentences "Time flies like an arrow" and "Fruit flies like a banana."]

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And for a completely different question, Bonnie, who are the other
proofreaders here on the Translators List?

On Tue, Mar 25, 2025 at 6:17 AM Bonnie Mehring <[email protected]> wrote:

> Dear Translators, Dear Proofreaders,
>
> I am very happy to say that I managed to prepare the news item for the
> upcoming Software Freedom Podcast episode in due time :) and there is
> still some time for proofreading and translating.
>
> You find the news item here: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/?pad=1389
>
> Thank you so much for your help!
>
> Best regards,
> Bonnie
>
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