Re: [needs proofread] June newsletter

On Friday, when I received your message about proofreading and translating
the June newsletter, I

--  Looked at the webpreview.

-- Saved on my computer the xhtml generated from the webpreview.

-- Saved on my computer the xhtml file you attached.

-- Compared the two xhtml files, and confirmed that there was more in the
    attached version than the webpreview version.

Now, on Sunday evening (my time), I am starting to proofread.
However, the webpreview is no longer available in the English
version I used; what is displayed there is in another language.

So I am proofreading from the xhtml version you attached, in
order that you will have it in Europe on Monday morning in
advance of the Tuesday publication.  I am attaching a version
with my suggestions, but it is in .odt format to get the benefit
of highlighting my suggestions with the LibreOffice Track
Changes feature.

1.  First figure alt text:  "a image of a computer with some lines
of code"  Replace the first word, "a", with "an."  English grammar.

2.  "the word copyright on top with a question mark: and"  Replace
the colon with a semicolon (to match the rest of the punctuation of
the sentence).

3.  "a picture with several info material from the fsfe from stickers to
postcards to posters."

(a)  Remove "several."  English grammar.  "Material" is a non-count
noun; you cannot have seven or several of them (in the sense in
in which the word is being used here.  Of course you can have a
complex object containing several constituent materials, but that
is a different sense of the word.)  An alternative would be to
replace "several" with "some."

(b)  Replace "fsfe" with "FSFE."

4.  "helps users avoid unnecessary costs while encouraging
device neutrality and user-controlled choices. , "  Remove
the extraneous comma.

5.  "Refund4Freedom is one of a broader set of activities promoting end-users'
rights such as the End of 10 campaign, that encourages users to keep using
their current hardware by switching to Free Software operating systems."
Replace "that" with "which."  This is a somewhat obscure rule of English
grammar:  the description of the End of 10 campaign is what is called a
"non-restrictive clause," and it should be preceded by the comma and
"which."

6.  I am not suggesting a change, but I had no idea what an INI was,
until I looked it up.

On Fri, May 30, 2025 at 10:20 AM Ana Galan <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> dear all,
>
> the newsletter is ready for your proofread and translation.
>
> attached the xhtml.
>
> Webpreview is giving me some problems so this is the last version I
> managed to upload. This version is missing the pictures and the alt text
> but the rest is the same as the xhtml attached.
>
> https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1472
>
> We will publish it next Tuesday morning.
>
> Best,
>
> Ana
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