svn commit: r44960 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install
Benedict Reuschling <[email protected]>
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Author: bcr
Date: Mon May 26 17:10:55 2014
New Revision: 44960
URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/44960
Log:
Remove contractions, improve capitalization, clean up redundant markup
and words.
Modified:
head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml
Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml Mon May 26 16:34:04 2014 (r44959)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml Mon May 26 17:10:55 2014 (r44960)
@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
<!DOCTYPE article PUBLIC "-//FreeBSD//DTD DocBook XML V5.0-Based Extension//EN"
"http://www.FreeBSD.org/XML/share/xml/freebsd50.dtd">
<article xmlns="http://docbook.org/ns/docbook" xmlns:xlink="http://www.w3.org/1999/xlink" version="5.0" xml:lang="en">
- <info><title>Remote Installation of the &os; Operating System without a
+ <info><title>Remote Installation of the &os; Operating System Without a
Remote Console</title>
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@
<para>In some cases, these companies will install your preferred
&linux; distribution if you request it. Using this option, we will
attempt to install &os;. In other cases, they may offer a rescue
- system which would be used in an emergency. It's possible to use
+ system which would be used in an emergency. It is possible to use
this for our purposes as well.</para>
<para>This article covers the basic installation and configuration
@@ -166,7 +166,7 @@
<para>Another important thing to set is the
<systemitem class="username">root</systemitem> password. This can be done by editing
- the <filename>conf/rootpw.conf</filename> file. Please keep in
+ <filename>conf/rootpw.conf</filename>. Please keep in
mind that the file will contain your password in the plain text,
thus we do not recommend to use real password here.
Nevertheless, this is just a temporary one-time password which
@@ -189,17 +189,16 @@ initconf_ip_ext1="192.168.0.2"
initconf_netmask_ext1="255.255.255.0"</programlisting>
<para>Do not forget to add the <literal>defaultrouter</literal>
- information to the <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename>
- file:</para>
+ information to <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename>:</para>
<programlisting>defaultrouter="192.168.0.1"</programlisting>
</sect3>
<sect3>
- <title>The <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> method</title>
+ <title>The <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> Method</title>
<para>When the network interface driver is known, it is more
- convenient to use the <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> file
+ convenient to use <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename>
for networking options. The syntax of this file is the same
as the one used in the standard &man.rc.conf.5; file of
&os;.</para>
@@ -214,7 +213,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
</sect2>
<sect2 xml:id="mfsbsd-build">
- <title>Building an <application>mfsBSD</application> image</title>
+ <title>Building an <application>mfsBSD</application> Image</title>
<para>The process of building an <application>mfsBSD</application>
image is pretty straightforward.</para>
@@ -236,9 +235,9 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
<screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>make BASE=/cdrom/<replaceable>7.0-RELEASE</replaceable></userinput></screen>
<note>
- <para>The above <command>make</command> command has to be run
+ <para>The above <command>make</command> has to be run
from the top level of the <application>mfsBSD</application>
- directory tree, i.e. <filename>~/mfsbsd-1.0-beta1/</filename>.</para>
+ directory tree, for example <filename>~/mfsbsd-1.0-beta1/</filename>.</para>
</note>
</sect2>
@@ -271,7 +270,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
</sect1>
<sect1 xml:id="installation">
- <title>Installation of The &os; Operating System</title>
+ <title>Installation of the &os; Operating System</title>
<para>The <application>mfsBSD</application> has been successfully
booted and it should be possible to log in through &man.ssh.1;.
@@ -307,7 +306,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
introduction, this article will present how to set up a system
with RAID-1 and <application>ZFS</application> capabilities.
Our set up will consist of a small &man.gmirror.8; mirrored
- <filename>/</filename> (root), <filename>/usr</filename> and <filename>/var</filename> file systems, and the rest of
+ <filename>/</filename> (root), <filename>/usr</filename> and <filename>/var</filename> dataset, and the rest of
the disk space will be allocated for a &man.zpool.8; mirrored
<application>ZFS</application> file system. Please note, that
the <application>ZFS</application> file system will be
@@ -369,7 +368,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
</callout>
<callout arearefs="gmirror2">
- <para>Note the <option>-F</option> option used for swap
+ <para>Note that <option>-F</option> is used for the swap
partition. This instructs &man.gmirror.8; to assume that
the device is in the consistent state after the power/system
failure.</para>
@@ -414,13 +413,13 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
</warning>
<para>Go to the <guimenuitem>Distributions</guimenuitem> menu,
- move the cursor with the arrow keys on the
- <option>Minimal</option> option, and check it by pressing
+ move the cursor with the arrow keys to
+ <option>Minimal</option>, and check it by pressing
<keycap>Space</keycap>. This article uses the Minimal
distribution in order to save network traffic, because the
system itself will be installed over
<application>ftp</application>. Exit this menu by choosing
- <option>Exit</option> option.</para>
+ <option>Exit</option>.</para>
<note>
<para>The <guimenuitem>Partition</guimenuitem> and
@@ -470,9 +469,9 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
<filename>/etc/resolv.conf</filename> and
<filename>/etc/fstab</filename> files. Do not forget to
properly set the network information and to enable
- <application>sshd</application> in the
- <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename> file. The contents of the
- <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> file will be similar to the
+ <application>sshd</application> in
+ <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename>. The contents of
+ <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> will be similar to the
following:</para>
<programlisting># Device Mountpoint FStype Options Dump Pass#
@@ -484,7 +483,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2
</listitem>
<listitem>
- <para>Create the <filename>/boot/loader.conf</filename> file,
+ <para>Create <filename>/boot/loader.conf</filename>
with the following contents:</para>
<programlisting>geom_mirror_load="YES"
@@ -539,7 +538,7 @@ zfs_load="YES"</programlisting>
&prompt.root; <userinput>zfs set mountpoint=/usr/ports tank/ports</userinput>
&prompt.root; <userinput>zfs set mountpoint=/usr/src tank/src</userinput></screen>
- <para>That's all. If you are interested in more details about
+ <para>That is all. If you are interested in more details about
<application>ZFS</application> on &os;, please refer to the <link xlink:href="http://wiki.freebsd.org/ZFS">ZFS</link> section of the &os;
Wiki.</para>
</sect1>
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