svn commit: r47095 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/ppp-and-slip

Author: dru
Date: Sun Jul 26 10:05:55 2015
New Revision: 47095
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/47095

Log:
  Fix redundancy.
  
  Sponsored by: Essen DevSummit Hackathon

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/ppp-and-slip/chapter.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/ppp-and-slip/chapter.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/ppp-and-slip/chapter.xml	Sun Jul 26 09:37:26 2015	(r47094)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/ppp-and-slip/chapter.xml	Sun Jul 26 10:05:55 2015	(r47095)
@@ -466,16 +466,16 @@
 	  above two lines.  More examples for this file can be found
 	  in <filename>/usr/share/examples/ppp/</filename>.</para>
 
-	<para>By default, the <command>ppp</command> command must be
-	  run as the <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>
-	  user.  To change this default, add the account of the user
+	<para>By default, <command>ppp</command> must be
+	  run as <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>.
+	  To change this default, add the account of the user
 	  who should run <command>ppp</command> to the <systemitem
 	    class="groupname">network</systemitem> group in
 	  <filename>/etc/group</filename>.</para>
 
 	<para>Then, give the user access to one or more entries in
-	  <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.conf</filename> using the
-	  <command>allow</command> command.  For example, to give
+	  <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.conf</filename> with
+	  <command>allow</command>.  For example, to give
 	  <systemitem class="username">fred</systemitem> and
 	  <systemitem class="username">mary</systemitem>
 	  permission to only the <literal>provider:</literal> entry,
@@ -599,7 +599,7 @@ exec /usr/sbin/ppp -direct $IDENT</progr
 	      <primary><acronym>PPP</acronym> shells</primary>
 	    </indexterm>
 
-	    <para>Create the <filename>ppp-shell</filename> file as
+	    <para>Create <filename>ppp-shell</filename> as
 	      above, and for each account with statically assigned
 	      <acronym>IP</acronym>s create a symbolic link to
 	      <filename>ppp-shell</filename>.</para>
@@ -623,8 +623,8 @@ exec /usr/sbin/ppp -direct $IDENT</progr
 	    <title>Setting Up <filename>ppp.conf</filename> for
 	      Dynamic <acronym>IP</acronym> Users</title>
 
-	    <para>The <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.conf</filename> file
-	      should contain something along the lines of:</para>
+	    <para>Ensure that <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.conf</filename>
+	      contains something along the lines of:</para>
 
 	    <programlisting>default:
   set debug phase lcp chat
@@ -1043,10 +1043,9 @@ exec /usr/sbin/ppp -direct pap$IDENT</pr
 
 	  <para>Each user logging in with this method will need to
 	    have a username/password in
-	    <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.secret</filename> file, or
+	    <filename>/etc/ppp/ppp.secret</filename>, or
 	    alternatively add the following option to authenticate
-	    users via PAP from the <filename>/etc/passwd</filename>
-	    file.</para>
+	    users via PAP from <filename>/etc/passwd</filename>.</para>
 
 	  <programlisting>enable passwdauth</programlisting>
 
@@ -1378,9 +1377,9 @@ ppp_profile="name_of_service_provider"</
 
       <para>The profile name (service tag) will be used in the PPPoE
 	configuration entry in <filename>ppp.conf</filename> as the
-	provider part of the <command>set device</command> command
-	(see the &man.ppp.8; manual page for full details).  It should
-	look like this:</para>
+	provider part for <command>set device</command>.  Refer to
+	&man.ppp.8; for full details.  It should look like
+	this:</para>
 
       <programlisting>set device PPPoE:<replaceable>xl1</replaceable>:<replaceable>ISP</replaceable></programlisting>
 
@@ -1516,8 +1515,8 @@ ppp_profile="adsl"</programlisting>
 	<filename>mpd.conf</filename>:</para>
 
       <note>
-	<para>This example of the <filename>mpd.conf</filename> file
-	  only works with <application>mpd</application> 4.x.</para>
+	<para>This example <filename>mpd.conf</filename> only works
+	  with <application>mpd</application> 4.x.</para>
       </note>
 
       <programlisting>default:
@@ -1555,8 +1554,8 @@ adsl:
       </callout>
     </calloutlist>
 
-    <para>The <filename>mpd.links</filename> file contains information
-      about the link, or links, to establish.  An example
+    <para>Information about the link, or links, to establish is found
+      in <filename>mpd.links</filename>.  An example
       <filename>mpd.links</filename> to accompany the above example
       is given beneath:</para>
 
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