svn commit: r49465 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers

Author: sevan
Date: Fri Oct  7 18:00:23 2016
New Revision: 49465
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/49465

Log:
  Fix dead link to Apple's whitepaper on their AutoFS implementation using Archive.org mirror.
  Reword sentence leading up to link with a friendlier toned version.
  Replace contractions & spelling mistake raised by Igor.
  
  PR:		213022
  Reported by:	Ranjit Marathay <rmarathay at gmail dot com>
  Approved by:	bcr (mentor) wblock
  Differential Revision:	https://reviews.freebsd.org/D8156

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml	Fri Oct  7 16:21:35 2016	(r49464)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml	Fri Oct  7 18:00:23 2016	(r49465)
@@ -999,9 +999,9 @@ Exports list on foobar:
 &prompt.root; <userinput>service autounmountd start</userinput></screen>
 
       <para>The &man.autofs.5; map format is the same as in other
-	operating systems, it might be desirable to consult
-	information from other operating systems, such as the <link
-	  xlink:href="http://images.apple.com/business/docs/Autofs.pdf">Mac
+	operating systems.  Information about this format from other
+	 sources can be useful, like the <link
+	  xlink:href="http://web.archive.org/web/20160813071113/http://images.apple.com/business/docs/Autofs.pdf">Mac
 	  OS X document</link>.</para>
 
       <para>Consult the &man.automount.8;, &man.automountd.8;,
@@ -3369,7 +3369,7 @@ options {
 	disable-empty-zone "0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.IP6.ARPA";
 	disable-empty-zone "1.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.IP6.ARPA";
 
-// If you've got a DNS server around at your upstream provider, enter
+// If you have a DNS server around at your upstream provider, enter
 // its IP address here, and enable the line below.  This will make you
 // benefit from its cache, thus reduce overall DNS traffic in the Internet.
 /*
@@ -3425,7 +3425,7 @@ options {
 	// query-source address * port NNNNN;
 };
 
-// If you enable a local name server, don't forget to enter 127.0.0.1
+// If you enable a local name server, do not forget to enter 127.0.0.1
 // first in your /etc/resolv.conf so this server will be queried.
 // Also, make sure to enable it in /etc/rc.conf.
 
@@ -3621,7 +3621,7 @@ zone "ip6.int"		{ type master; file "/et
 // understand how DNS and BIND work.  There are sometimes
 // non-obvious pitfalls.  Setting up a slave zone is usually simpler.
 //
-// NB: Don't blindly enable the examples below. :-)  Use actual names
+// NB: Do not blindly enable the examples below. :-)  Use actual names
 // and addresses instead.
 
 /* An example dynamic zone
@@ -4763,7 +4763,7 @@ $include Kexample.com.+005+nnnnn.ZSK.key
 	<programlisting>LoadModule php5_module        libexec/apache24/libphp5.so</programlisting>
 
 <!--
-I don't think this is still needed
+I do not think this is still needed
 AddModule mod_php5.c
     &lt;IfModule mod_php5.c&gt;
         DirectoryIndex index.php index.html
@@ -5015,7 +5015,7 @@ AddModule mod_php5.c
 	  a forum for the trade of unlicensed commercial software or
 	  worse.  If anonymous <acronym>FTP</acronym> uploads are
 	  required, then verify the permissions so that these files
-	  can not be read by other anonymous users until they have
+	  cannot be read by other anonymous users until they have
 	  been reviewed by an administrator.</para>
       </note>
     </sect2>
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