svn commit: r49744 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/platforms

Author: wblock
Date: Fri Dec 16 23:28:17 2016
New Revision: 49744
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/49744

Log:
  Cleanup from linimon's patch along with some improvenating of
  Englishification.
  
  PR:		213060
  Submitted by:	linimon

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/platforms/sparc.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/platforms/sparc.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/platforms/sparc.xml	Fri Dec 16 22:29:39 2016	(r49743)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/platforms/sparc.xml	Fri Dec 16 23:28:17 2016	(r49744)
@@ -39,12 +39,12 @@
     <a href="&base;/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/committers-guide/archs.html">
     Tier 2</a> architecture, and as such is not fully supported by the
     <a href="&base;">FreeBSD</a> project.  Although fully functional, the port
-    is not as mature as the existing i386 or amd64 ports.</p>
+    is not as feature-complete as the i386 or amd64 ports.</p>
 
   <h3><a name="hw">Hardware List</a></h3>
 
   <p>A summary of supported systems follows.  SMP is supported on all supported
-    systems that contain more than 1 processor.  For full details please see
+    systems that contain more than 1 processor.  For full details, please see
     the
     <a href="&base;/releases/&rel.current;R/hardware.html">
     hardware notes</a> of the <a href="&base;/releases/">
@@ -87,8 +87,8 @@
     <li>Sun Ultra 450</li>
  </ul>
 
-  <p>The following systems are partially supported by FreeBSD.  In
-    particular the fibre channel controllers in SBus-based systems are not
+  <p>These systems are partially supported by FreeBSD.  In particular,
+    the fibre channel controllers in SBus-based systems are not
     supported.  However, it is possible to use these with a SCSI controller
     supported by the esp(4) driver (Sun ESP SCSI, Sun FAS Fast-SCSI
     and Sun FAS366 Fast-Wide SCSI controllers).</p>
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@
 
   <p>Starting with 7.2-RELEASE, sparc64 systems based on
     Sun UltraSPARC III and beyond are also supported by FreeBSD, which includes
-    the following known working systems:</p>
+    these known working systems:</p>
 
   <ul>
     <li>Sun Blade 1000</li>
@@ -124,8 +124,8 @@
     <li>Sun Netra 20/Netra T4</li>
   </ul>
 
-  <p>The following Sun UltraSPARC systems are not tested but
-    believed to be also supported by FreeBSD:</p>
+  <p>These Sun UltraSPARC systems are not tested but are
+    believed to also be supported by FreeBSD:</p>
 
   <ul>
     <li>Sun Fire V125</li>
@@ -134,15 +134,15 @@
   </ul>
 
   <p>Starting with 7.4-RELEASE and 8.1-RELEASE, sparc64 systems based on Fujitsu SPARC64 V
-    are also supported by FreeBSD, which includes the following
+    are also supported by FreeBSD, which includes these
     known working systems:</p>
 
   <ul>
     <li>Fujitsu PRIMEPOWER&reg; 250</li>
   </ul>
 
-  <p>The following Fujitsu SPARC64 systems are not tested but believed to be
-    also supported by FreeBSD:</p>
+  <p>These Fujitsu SPARC64 systems have not been tested but are believed to
+    also be supported by FreeBSD:</p>
 
   <ul>
     <li>Fujitsu PRIMEPOWER 450</li>
@@ -150,20 +150,9 @@
     <li>Fujitsu PRIMEPOWER 850</li>
   </ul>
 
-  <p>If you have a system that is not listed here please try it, and let
+  <p>If you have a system that is not listed here, please try it and let
     <a href="mailto:[email protected]">us</a> know about it.</p>
 
-  <h3><a name="who">Credits</a></h3>
-
-  <p>The following people have been working either in the spotlights or behind
-    the scenes to get the FreeBSD port off the ground:</p>
-
-  <ul>
-    <li>&a.jake.email;</li>
-    <li>&a.tmm.email;</li>
-    <li>&a.obrien.email;</li>
-  </ul>
-
   <h3><a name="list">FreeBSD/sparc64 mailing list</a></h3>
 
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