svn commit: r51306 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/building-products

Author: eadler
Date: Thu Dec 14 06:11:36 2017
New Revision: 51306
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/51306

Log:
  building-products: clean up a little bit
  
  - remove the keyword soup that claims that FreeBSD still supports IPX,
    ATM, EISA, and related.
  
  - remove the word 'advanced' used way too often (and untruthfully
    now-a-days)
  
  - make 'available technology' not a goal of the document, thus making it
    easier to keep up to date and reasonable
  
  - wordsmith the abstract a bit

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/building-products/article.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/building-products/article.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/building-products/article.xml	Wed Dec 13 19:50:44 2017	(r51305)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/building-products/article.xml	Thu Dec 14 06:11:36 2017	(r51306)
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
     <abstract>
       <title>Abstract</title>
 
-      <para>The FreeBSD project is a worldwide, voluntary, and
+      <para>The FreeBSD project is a worldwide, volunteer based, and
         collaborative project, which develops a portable and high-quality
         operating system.  The FreeBSD project distributes the source
         code for its product under a liberal license, with the
@@ -110,10 +110,6 @@
             Project and its organizational structure.</simpara>
         </listitem>
         <listitem>
-          <simpara>An overview of the available technology in the
-            project.</simpara>
-        </listitem>
-        <listitem>
           <simpara>An understanding of its development model and
             release engineering processes.</simpara>
         </listitem>
@@ -286,30 +282,6 @@
             </para>
         </listitem>
         <listitem>
-          <simpara>Support for the following technologies, protocols
-            and standards: <!-- Keyword soup. Urk. -->
-            <acronym>ATA</acronym>, <acronym>ATAPI</acronym>,
-            <acronym>ATM</acronym>, <trademark>Bluetooth</trademark>,
-            <acronym>CAM</acronym>, <trademark>CardBus</trademark>,
-            <acronym>DHCP</acronym>, <acronym>DNS</acronym>,
-            <trademark>EISA</trademark>,
-            <trademark>Ethernet</trademark>, <acronym>FDDI</acronym>,
-            Fibre Channel, <acronym>GPIB</acronym>, IEEE 1394, IPv4,
-            IPv6, <acronym>IPSEC</acronym>,
-            <trademark>IPX</trademark>, <acronym>ISDN</acronym>,
-            <acronym>MAC</acronym>, <acronym>NIS</acronym>,
-            <acronym>NFS</acronym>,  OpenSSH, <acronym>OPIE</acronym>,
-            <acronym>PAM</acronym>, <trademark>PCI</trademark>,
-            <acronym>PCMCIA</acronym>, <trademark>POSIX</trademark>,
-            <acronym>PnP</acronym>, <acronym>RAID</acronym>,
-            <acronym>RPC</acronym>, <acronym>SATA</acronym>,
-            <acronym>SCSI</acronym>, <acronym>SMB</acronym>,
-            <acronym>TCP</acronym>, <acronym>USB</acronym>,
-            <acronym>VESA</acronym>, <acronym>VLAN</acronym>,
-            <acronym>VLB</acronym>,
-            <trademark>WebNFS</trademark>.</simpara>
-        </listitem>
-        <listitem>
           <simpara>A modular symmetric multiprocessing capable kernel,
             with loadable kernel modules and a flexible and easy to
             use configuration system.</simpara>
@@ -328,21 +300,21 @@
             environment.</simpara>
         </listitem>
         <listitem>
-          <simpara>Advanced security features: Mandatory Access
+          <simpara>Security features: Mandatory Access
             Control (&man.mac.9;), jails (&man.jail.2;),
             <acronym>ACL</acronym>s, and in-kernel
             cryptographic device support.</simpara>
         </listitem>
         <listitem>
-          <simpara>Advanced networking features: firewall-ing, QoS
+          <simpara>Networking features: firewall-ing, QoS
             management, high-performance TCP/IP networking with
-            support for many advanced features.</simpara>
+            support for many extensions.</simpara>
           <simpara>FreeBSD's in-kernel Netgraph  (&man.netgraph.4;)
             framework allows kernel networking modules to be connected
             together in flexible ways.</simpara>
         </listitem>
         <listitem>
-          <simpara>Support for advanced storage technologies: Fibre
+          <simpara>Support for storage technologies: Fibre
             Channel,  <acronym>SCSI</acronym>, software and hardware
             RAID, <acronym>ATA</acronym> and
             <acronym>SATA</acronym>.</simpara>
@@ -626,7 +598,7 @@ This speeds up arg reduction by a factor of 2 for |x| 
               FreeBSD.  For example:</para>
             <formalpara>
               <title>Track FreeBSD source code</title>
-              <para>The project makes it easy to mirror its SVN 
+              <para>The project makes it easy to mirror its SVN
                 repository using <link xlink:href="&url.articles.committers-guide;/article.html#svn-advanced-use-setting-up-svnsync"><!--
                   --><application>svnsync</application></link>. Having
                 the complete history of the source is useful when
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