Re: Ritual Memory. by Will Dockery
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> Rik Roots wrote: > Will Dockery wrote: > > >> "Rik Roots" <rik> wrote >> >> Derivative repetitions that roll across the screen >> >> I will not rip it out of here >> it is an honest poem. >> So I will not edit it >> why would I even want to do that? >> >> A *good* poem is not an honest poem, it is an *entertaining* poem. This >> poem >> ain't singing and dancing. Fix it, or put it out of it's misery. Please. >> Rik, knee deep. >> >> I think you're right--- those last lines kind of blow it with >> "commentary". I'll try it with those lines chopped, and see how it works: >> >> > > Still more song than poem, but now you have an interesting close. > > Thank you for taking the time to edit. > > Rik, knee deep. > -- > Download Rik's poetry chapbooks for free from > http://www.kalieda.org/poems/xbuy.html > > Clot: the searchable online poetry magazine listing service > http://www.kalieda.org/clot/clot.php Thank again, Rik, wherever you are. 😏 This response appears in the discussion at: http://www.jlaforums.com/viewtopic.php?p=658084867#658084867 -- Via JLA Forums web gateway for alt.arts.poetry.comments: http://www.jlaforums.com/viewforum.php?f=655