Re: Second version of the booklet

Part two of my corrections follows:

On Sun, Jan 23, 2011 at 1:14 PM, Vivek Prakash <[email protected]> wrote:

> Hi,
>
> Here's a list of minor corrections I've identified.  I'll keep reading
> through and provide more comments as I get the time, but I know you're up
> against a deadline.
>
> Vivek
>
>
> Page 2: inset - TODO before printing / finalizing:
> 1. remove "YOUR NAME" (maybe replace with "and others")
> 2. Add credits for graphics, currently has no names.
>
> Page 3: Improper quotes around "Quick Tweet":
> >KDE micro-blogging application. It has a simple
> >„Quick Tweet“; with it, a click of a button is all you
>
> Page 4: wording when talking about Blogilo: suggest replacing "top" with
> "best"
> >The top is that it handles multiple blogs
>
> Page 4: mention Emails for Kontact introduction:
> >Manage your life with Kontact. Keep track of your
> > appointments, deadlines and vacations, manage
> Suggestion (change in *bold*): *Read your emails, keep* track of your
> appointments, [...]
>
> Page 4: inset - Improper quotes around "start" and "All":
> >super key often has the
> > ‚start‘ text on it, or a
> and
> > ticking the „All“ check box.
>
> Page 4: inset re: Kontact components: fix punctuation: replace . with , at
> end of first sentence.
> Currently:
> Although you can
> open the Kontact
> components separa-
> tely, e.g. for Mail, Ca-
> lendar or Contacts.
> They are tailored to
> work well with each
> other within Kontact.
>
> Suggestion (change in *bold*): Although [...] or Contacts*, they* [...].
>
>
> Page 5: Improper quotes on Let's and Kontact's:
> > Let‘s take a look at some of them!
>
> > Kontact‘s email component
>
> > Kontact‘s Calendar
>
> Page 6: quotes on 'torrent':
> >   It is easy to create a ‚torrent‘ to
>
> Page 6: inset - fix quotes for "Blog preview" and "Fetch blog style" and
> "mail apps" below:
> Currently:
> In Blogilo, you can pre-
> view your published post
> by selecting the „Blog
> preview“ tab and clicking
> on the „Fetch blog style“
> button. Shortly, you will [...]
>
> and:
> Its appeal among
> other „mail apps“ is
> that you get a very
>
> Page 7: quotes on aren't:
> > Learning and playing aren‘t ...
>
> Page 9: *Battleship* has been renamed (trademark issues) to *Naval Battle*
> .
>
> Page 9: quotes on "you're" and "game's" in the box starting with "KDE Games
> are quick and easy to learn"
>
> Page 10: inset: games.kde.org should not be truncated across two lines
> (sorry if that repeats a comment from someone else..).
>
> Page 12: box: suggest placing KMyMoney and Skrooge in *bold *font to match
> normal procedure for program names.
>
> Page 12: inset: fix improper apostrophe: Words'
> > Words‘ side panels
>
> Page 17: capitalization: say "DigiKam" instead of "Digikam" to be
consistent with page 16.

Page 17: inset: proper quotes on "Only create image" and "Burn".

Page 18: fix BSD reference and match with page 30 inset: something like
Currently:
If you use Linux or Unix [BSD? ~i#], KDE has soft-
ware to provide your basic working environment.

Suggestion: "If you use Linux, FreeBSD, or Solaris, KDE has software to
provide your basic working environment.  (KDE applications are also
available on Windows and Mac OS X.)"

Page18: suggest including reference to upcoming plasma mobile.  Current
sentence:
"Additional Workspaces are in development."
Suggestion: "Additional Workspaces, such as Plasma Mobile, are in
development."

Page 19: fix quotes:
Inset - change "other widget's" to "other widgets' ", and fix ' on
"plasma's".
Text: fix quotes for "Newspaper", "Application" and "Applications".
Currently:

With the click of a button, you can choose between
two desktop views: the „Newspaper“ and „Applica-
tion“ layouts. The „Newspaper“ view displays your
choice of widgets showing web pages, news feeds,
pictures, weather reports and more. The „Appli-
cations“ view includes a launcher with commonly
used applications and a search box to find others.
Applications are launched full screen to make the

Page 20:
Tips and Tricks: remove comma "The technology behind plasma allows" not
"plasma, allows".

Para 1, Widgets Everywhere, fix quote on it's.

Box: "Unlock widgets" rather than „Unlock Widgets“

Page 21:
fix quotes in text, boxes, and side.

Page 21: Activities paragraph, insert "on": "or you need a different set of
widgets depending *on* what you are working on? "

Alternatively, consider this rephrasing of the sentence:
"or you need a different set of widgets for different work?"

Page 22: fix quotes on "virtual desktop".

Page 23: restructure sentence: " Quickly, a community grew around this
effort." to "A community soon grew around this effort."

Page 23: fix sentence in 2nd paragraph.  Currently, ends with:
[...] user support, and, most importantly, KDE appreci-
ates and involves its users. All kinds of people are
involved--an 18-year-old student from India, a 32- [...]

Suggestion: "user support. Most importantly, KDE appreciates and involves
its users. All kinds of people participate -- [...]"

Page 24: suggest a heading before bullet list of Values.

Page 25: box on KDE e.V.: fix quotes.

Page 26: fix quotes in text.

Page 27: rename heading "What is in it for me?" to "What's in it for me?"
Page 27: don't truncate website link (jointhegame).

Page 32: change "applets" to "widgets" in first sentence for consistency.
"Plasmate is the dream tool for writing Plasma ap-
plets. "

Page 33: Change "KDE4 tutorials" to "KDE tutorials"

Page 34: suggest not truncating any text by that big box.

Page 35: fix apostrophes in box.

Page 36: fix apostrophe in world's.

Also, I'll repeat comments elsewhere that the screenshots could look better
- the content is fine, but somehow they don't look good in the PDF file..
maybe it's quality or non-ratio resizing?

Finall,y I don't know what's going on with the quotes/apostrophes - some of
them appear as commas, others are inverted from how they should be.  I have
tried to identify specific page numbers to make that easier to fix.

Overall, I want to say, GREAT JOB.  The booklet looks superb, and I'm really
impressed by the way Felix and Damien (and others, I know, but those two
names come to the top of my mind right now) have picked up the project.

It's really close now guys, keep proof-reading and working away at it.

Best,
Vivek


>
> On Fri, Jan 21, 2011 at 10:09 AM, Felix Michel <[email protected]>wrote:
>
>>
>> - workspaces part
>> - link list
>> - typos
>>
>> I suggest that people tell me where they find typos (page number) and then
>> i
>> correct them. To copy paste from the google docs is not really a good
>> workflow
>> for me, because then i will create new typos in my opinion.
>>
>
>
>
>> Ps: same location as usual: www.tradukt.ch/kde_booklet_ver2.pdf
>>
>>
>>

 
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