Edit/Approval - Black Stallion Gloves - Doug White
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Doug, Thanks for the quick turnaround. A few minor edits below in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. The first two are the most important. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/nsmtvpo Congratulations on a Brownie Point. Cheers, Richard ### BLACK STALLION WATERPROOF LINED INSULATED COWHIDE WINTER WOR ### EDIT: Apparently Report Writer won't let a title spill over onto a second line without some effort. Can you break the title into two lines, or make some other fix? (I don't use Report Writer and can't help you there. If you do need help try the BGT Upload Help group.) But you need to complete the title. You missed one of my EDITs on the last go-round: You need to state somewhere if you do or do not wear the gloves when hiking. ### Measured Length (Pair): 6 x 11 in (15 x 28 cm) ### EDIT: Delete "(Pair)" You've given the length of one glove. ### They are insulated with a multi-blend insulation. ### EDIT: MultiBlend [I missed this last time. MultiBlend is a brand or trade name and thus must be used just as the manufacturer does.] ### The thumb design is labeled as "natural wing" by the manufacturer that allows for versatile movement and is less stiff. ### EDIT: Make this two sentences: "The thumb design is labeled as "natural wing" by the manufacturer. This allows for versatile movement and is less stiff." Or "The thumb design, which is labeled as "natural wing" by the manufacturer, allows for versatile movement and is less stiff." ### The leather has worn slightly leaving some flat and blemished spots on the finger tips, ### Edit: fingertips [one word]