Edit/Approval - Vivobarefoot Ultra - Steve Kidd
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Steve – Another praiseworthy job – a good report and very carefully limited to your dedicated use. A few edits below, in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/q4kcnkl Cheers (and Congratulations on a Brownie point), Richard ________________ ###TESTER INFORMATION ### Edit/Comment: While not required I recommend including here any particular information relevant to the gear under review – torso and sleeve length for a jacket, hat size for a hat, etc. Here, your standard shoe size. ### Vivobarefoot Ultra shoes are a barefoot designed running shoe ### Edit: barefoot-designed [with a hyphen] ### with a removable inner bootie that locks into place in both the heal and forefoot. ### EDIT: heel [spelling – the kind of spelling a spell checker often misses] ### Most folks were wearing Crocs throughout this portion of the trek, but I noticed one buddy had a slick looking pair of shoes that appeared to fit much more securely than majority of us. ### EDIT: than the shoes worn by a majority of us [or "than the rest of us"] ### In the April, 2013### EDIT: Delete "the;" delete the comma ###After receiving the Ultra's ### EDIT: Ultras [not possessive – no apostrophe. Here and elsewhere.] ### If I debris is an expected concern I take the booties with the shoes. ### EDIT: delete "I" [Or rephrase to "If I expect debris . . ."] ### I used a pair of pliers from a Leatherman to remove it. ### EDIT: from a multitool [Can't use brand name of products not under review except to refer to your own ORs or Test Series, as you do at the end.] ###They are actually designed as running shoes ### Edit: Here and in a couple of other places your use of the pronoun "they" is a bit unclear as to antecedent. Please check and consider substituting "the shoes" or something similar.