EDIT/APPROVAL - Ahnu Sugarpines - Kathy Waters

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Kathy,
  
 A few edits, in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising upload to http://tinyurl.com/nf7t3b9 http://tinyurl.com/nf7t3b9. See you on the next one. Congratulations on a Brownie point.
  
 Cheers, Richard
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 ###LOCATION:            Canon City, Colorado, USA ###
 Edit: Everywhere else in the Review you have the little squiggle – Cañon City [also on piñon]. Why not here?
  
 ### Sizes Available: 5 - 11 Women's ###
 Edit: Does Ahnu indicate a width? If so I'd add it.
  
 ### approximately 100,000 acres (40,468 hectares) of Bureau of Land Management (BLM) land ###
 Edit: Imperial is approximate, so I'd round off the Continental to 40,000 hectares.
  
 ### The shoe laces are inconspicuous ###
 Edit: shoelaces [one word]
  
 ### so it could just be the fact that the Sugarpines are low-cut shoes without that extra structure I need about my ankles. ###
 Edit: for my ankles
  
 ### Thanks to my spare socks and the Sugarpines quick-drying, the hike continued with no real damage sustained.###
 Edit: Sugarpines' [possessive]
 EDIT: quick drying [two words, no apostrophe]
  
 ### I think they turned out pretty good! ###
 EDIT: pretty well
  
 
 ### The Sugarpines spent most of the winter pining (pun intended) in my gear closet. ###
 Comment: Equally appalling.
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