Re: EDIT/Approval - OR GSI HALULITE MINIMALIST David Wilkes

I love BGT.org editors! Thanks for finding all my mistakes as well as the helpful suggestions!I made all of the suggested changes and uploaded.I added a bit at the beginning about having to replace the sleeve and how I got the replacement. Great suggestion. Thanks.
BTW I also have tried pouring using the gripper held to the side, but found it awkward and the steam could still burn my hands. I find it simpler and far safer to simply place it in the sleeve before pouring.
Thanks again,Dave

 
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 Subject: [BackpackGearTest] EDIT/Approval - OR GSI HALULITE MINIMALIST David Wilkes
   
    HiDavid, Thanksfor submitting your Owner Review. Here are your edits in the usual format of, EDIT– must changeedit– my recommended change if you agreeComment– is just that.  “
|  Listed
 Weight 
 Dementions
 Volume  |  6.3 oz (179 g)
 4.20'' x 4.20'' x 4.60'' (10.5 x 10.5 x 11.5 cm )
 0.6L  |

EDIT– Spelling of “Dimensions” Edit– 4.20” x 4.20” x 4.60” The “0” is unnecessary as it adds nothing to themeasurement – literally JEDIT– Remove the extra space after “11.5 cm” “The lid contains two openings on either side; one larger fordrinking/pouring and one smaller to let the air in when drinking/pouring.”edit – I’d remove, “on either side”,as it confuses the total number of available openings. Or, state it this way, “Thelid contains two openings; one larger for drinking/pouring [and on the oppositeside,] one smaller to let the air in when drinking/pouring.” “With the lid in the first position,the pot can be used as a cup allowing me to drink from it without my skin beingexposed to the (possibly hot) metal of the pot while helping to keep thecontents hot/cold.”Edit – I’d add a separate sentenceabout the ability of the pot keeping its contents hot or cold. Your sentence isconfusing in that it appears that the pot may be hot while keeping its contents“cold.” “This makes a handle (which in myexperience on this type of pot often just becomes hot from the heat of thestove anyway) unnecessary.”Edit – I would rewrite this forclarity. Maybe like this, which keeps your words in a different order, [Thismakes a handle unnecessary, which in my experience on this type of pot oftenjust becomes hot from the heat of the stove anyway.] “The gripper includes an internalmagnet intended to it to stick to the fuel canister while not in use.”EDIT – Remove [to it] and add [it]after “stick” so it reads this way as an example, [The gripper includes aninternal magnet intended to stick it to the fuel canister while not in use.]Comment– I’d also replace “while” and instead use [when] not in use. “NOTE: the gripper is intended to be used to hold the pot(e.g. while string food during cooking) or to remove the pot from the stove.”EDIT – (e.g. while [stirring] foodduring cooking) “It should NOT be used to pour hotcontents of the cup, that is better done AFTER placing the pot into thesleeve…and yes I did have to learn that the hard way.”Comment – I had the same issue withmine and made sure I always poured from the side so my fingers stayed out ofthe steam. “The Foon is a combination of a forkand spoon, often referred to as a “spork”.Edit – Unless you’re using “foon” asa proper noun, use lower case as it is just another tool, like fork, spoon, andspork. Please check uniformity throughout your report as it is capitalizednumerous times unnecessarily IMO. “For example chicken broth withdried vegetables  and dried cheese tortellini.”EDIT – Remove the extra space after “vegetables”and I’d add a comma after “example” “While heating water or food I placeuse the lid inverted to help retain heat.”EDIT – pick either “place’ or ‘use’,but remove one of them. “Obviously when the pot is on thestove this is not a good idea, so it is recommended to never put the lid on thepot in the normal position while cooking.”Comment – Who is recommending this?If it is you, change it to say you are recommending it, and if it is themanufacturer, then quote them. Obviously, this potentially reduce the chancesof awarding yet another Darwin Award…  “Most often I use the pot with oneof my small canister top or alcohol (commercial and homemade) stoves, but Ihave used it with larger camp stoves, some compact wood burning stoves, and afew times with a campfire.”Edit – did you mean “canister top”?or canister type? “I have found this to be the mosteffective method of cleaning my pots and after disposing the sand (I burry itin my latrine along with my food scraps) I am not left with scrubber thatsmells of my food.”EDIT – spelling of [bury] “I believe this is what damaged myoriginal sleeve, which resulted in my replacing it.”Edit - this is the first time youmention having to replace an original part of your cook set. I’d have preferredto have read about it much earlier and with some detail as to how the damage  occurred, contact with customer service or theretail store (if any) and the amount of use you got from it as well as theamount of use from its replacement.  So that was all I found. 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