RE: Edit/Approval - ECCO Biom boots - Kathy Waters

Richard,

 

Thanks once again for finding all my dumb mistakes!  These are nice boots and I think you would look smashing in hot pink laces!  Made the corrections, deleted the test file and uploaded.

 

Kathy

 

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Sent: Wednesday, April 27, 2016 8:40 AM
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Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - ECCO Biom boots - Kathy Waters

 






Kathy, 

 

Edits on #4 below, in the usual EDIT/Edit/Comment format. Mostly Edits. Upload to http://tinyurl.com/hl436dt after revising.

 

Cheers, Richard

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### Size Reviewed: 39 EU (US Women's 8.8,5) ###

EDIT: (U S Women's 8-8.5)

 

### Materials: Uppers - yak nubuck ###
Comment: Really??! 

 

### This area's terrain runs the gamut of evergreen forests, to grassy plains to high desert rock and dirt/mud (as the moisture or lack thereof dictates).###

Edit: Comma is unnecessary. If you keep it, add another comma after "plains."

 

### Between all the horrible weather elsewhere, most of my winter time in Colorado over the last two winters was wacky - while the previous winter started out mild and ended up bitter cold and snowy. This winter has been

bee-u-ti-ful! We had lots of sunshine, little precipitation and for the most part, the temperatures were above normal. ###

Edit: This would read better if you ended the first sentence after "wacky," changed the period after "snowy" to a comma, and added "but" before "this winter." That way the contrast you describe is included in the second sentence, not both sentences.

 

### I think it's cool that ECCO includes a second pair of laces with the Biom Terrain Plus boots! ###

Comment: I wish every manufacturer did this, though not necessarily in hot pink.

 

### Thanks to a roomy (but not, too roomy) toe box, I have not suffered one blister or "black" toe due to rubbing or banging my toes###
Edit: Comma after "but not" is unnecessary.

Edit: So are the quotation marks around "black." If you keep them I'd close the quotation after "toe." Black toe is a well-known phenomenon among hikers and skiers.

 

### rotecting my toes when I do slam into that errant down tree limb or that rock that moved just as I went to walk over it. ###

EDIT: downed tree limb

 

### Oh, and dry! Just today, I was out in the snow for a hike and though my pants got soaked, my hat and jacket covered with snow, the Bioms were constantly covered in the snow and still they remained perfectly dry inside. ###

Edit: I think you mean "my feet remained perfectly dry."

 

### The Bioms worked really, really well on most all the trails I encountered ###

EDIT: almost all

 

### Amazingly, as of yet, there is no undue wear and tear to be seen on the Bioms. ###

Edit: Second comma (after "yet") is unnecessary.

 

### They even still smell like leather with no special care. ###

Edit: I'd rearrange, the better to make your point: "Even with no special care they still smell like leather."